Kylie

Sometimes I can give a kid an ‘adult’ responsibility and they snap out of crying. I don’t know if that would work here, Rae, but she’s trying. XD

@rae @theshadow

Barnes

“I was thinking we start down this corridor along the edge of the castle, and scour the place for clues and people,” Barnes told Percival.

The group waited a few minutes for Reid to calm his brother, who remained stubbornly curled up. He was still agitated.

Barnes was used to people who looked much younger than their…[Read more]

Of course you can do whatever you want, I’m playing the other side’s advocate so you have balanced reasons for whatever you do.

@linus-smallprint

(also, anyone else who is reading this, what do you think?)

You have a very sensible writer voice, with hints of humor and warmth. I think because of your semi-calm tone, you don’t seem like the kind of person who would write a super intense POV scene of shame for Eric, at least not until the arc’s climax.

And from what I can…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Fine. *pouts*

😂😂

@ellette-giselle

Joseph. Julian. Sabina.

Adrian… hehe. 🤪

@ellette-giselle

I think so. Are you sure he couldn’t be a church leader at seventeenish, if he’s one of the only believers in that town?

If that’s what you’re leaning towards, then go for it. Maybe pray about it and think a little longer if it’s a hugeee chance, though.

@ellette-giselle

Why does he have to become an elder? I think (if I’m understanding this right) if the important things are happening while he is seventeen, that’s where you want to be. Maybe he can be a part of the inner core group of the church without being an elder, sort of getting mentored by everyone else.

However, you’re right. If all t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Probably. 🤔

Ehh, fine, you can take the rest of them. Just don’t do anything to Sabina or Joseph or Julian. 🤪

@ellette-giselle

Remember?!? I STOLE Joseph. So you can’t kill him!!!!!

I will let you borrow him to finish writing/editing your book if you say you will be NICE to him. Otherwise, he’s my character now.

@keilah-h The shading looks awesome! Did you draw that?

@ellette-giselle

Lol, I stand corrected. 🤣

But, umm…

then. I mean, Joseph doesn’t last THAT long. (whoops. cat’s out of the bag and running wild. hehehehe)

What does this mean exactly?? 🤨

@theducktator

Sorry it took me so long to get back to you! I got busy and had to take a bit of a break from kp.

Nice to meet you! Army of tiny ducks? XD I love ducks lol. Those genres sound fun, kinda the same thing I do (mostly dystopian here, but I do have a fantasy dystopian)

I like birding too! What’s your favorite bird you have seen?

Yw!…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Probably best not to, yeah. 😅 I’ll be sure to add some emojis next time. 🤪😂

@ellette-giselle Sarcasm does not really work over messaging like this. Especially when people don’t know each other in real life. But probably better to check just in case we end up with another misunderstanding like the other day. 😜

@ellette-giselle

No, I’m just teasing you. XD.

@ellette-giselle

Okay, then yes, that’s makes sense.

LOL. Okay, I’m sorry for interrupting your story. I’ll just sit here quietly and wait for the next segment. 😂

@ellette-giselle

What do you mean by splitting the sections into two parts?
I think it’s fine as long as you don’t end the last scene abruptly and put like a marker, like “six years later…”

I don’t know, just with Joseph feeling called to go off alone to a different city where basically no one is a Christian… I understand it is a missionary st…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

WOAH. Time jump. But I love the new side plot. Although, Joseph is basically becoming Aaron now, like Linus has mentioned. I wonder how you could change his circumstances to make it feel completely different from Aaron. But anyway, great job! 👏 I’ll listen to the song later and let you know what I think.