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@ethryndal Narnia: Voyage of the Dawn Treader, when Eustace was writing in his diary about his cousins.

Well, he’s not as dead as we would’ve hoped.

@winter-rose Hahahaha! I love the conclusion. And sparkleified… awesome invention! Great job!

Brava, @Ethryndal !!

@winter-rose Cool!

Here’s mine: “Be careful not to choke on your aspirations,….”

@winter-rose I seem to remember Cap saying something similar to this in one of the Avengers movies….? But I’m not sure if it was this one.

@ethryndal Yeah, negative arcs are rarer these days. If you can’t think of any you’ve read, that may be a good reason to pick a negative arc book up so you can see what it’s like. And @daeus had a good example as well.

@audrey-caylin Correct. Disaster can be anything from losing a physical fight, learning about a devastating revelation, failing to complete an objective, or anything else that makes things go poorly for the character.

And fantastic use of that in your story. All of that looks great!

@jenali Fantastic. Those look like great ways of bringing physical consequences into the equation.

@anna-brie I read that series a loooong time ago, but if memory serves me well, that’s a great example of a strong flat character arc, especially in the later books in the series. Thinking through your favorite flat character arcs in other stories is a great way of learning how to do it in your own story.

@daeus Love it! That prompt about the villain just makes me laugh. Ah, if only… 😛

@winter-rose
First off, may I just say that I found this story very amusing!
For one, I agree with @ingridrd that the scene with his mom should be moved to another place. Perhaps after Sam’s tale and he comes home, the mom says “Start from the beginning”, and that would be the ending.

@winter-rose
WOW. I noticed a few things about this.
1. The protagonist’s voice is hilarious. Don’t change a thing about Sam’s personality.
2. I think the first scene is really good, but I’m not sure it’s necessary for the story. Everything after Sam starts telling about his day is amazing, just maybe think about putting the scene with his mom in…[Read more]

@r-j-wordsmith Really? Wow, I didn’t know that! I wonder if he was thinking like Lewis when he came up with the idea of a time-travel book to be like Narnia (of course, Tolkien never intended it to be allegorical) I like the Hobbit better too, but that’s probably because it is my favorite book. 😛

@audrey-caylin My current plan is to steal my sister’s copy of the book when I’m home over Spring break. 😉 That’s awesome that you were able to find it so clearly! Figuring out why an author chose to write a scene in a certain way is one of my favorite ways to apply and test what I’ve learned about writing.

@kate-flournoy Both of those look great! Have you thought about what the reaction sequences would look like for both of those action sequences?

@audrey-caylin That’s a fantastic question. Like @daeus said, I think a good rule of thumb is that a scene ends whenever you have a scene break or chapter break, but scenes can sometime extend over scene…[Read more]

@anna-brie Looks like a good solid base there for what looks like 2 similar but distinct character arcs on the importance of community and on how to relate between genders properly. Nice work!

@anna-brie Examples and messages are both great potential catalysts! Repetition is a great way of helping characters to change.

@anna-brie That makes a lot of sense. Sometimes (probably most of the time, now that I think about it), God’s sanctifying process is slow and gradual, so it can take some work to see how God has been changing you over the course of several years. And it certainly works differently for personalities as well! That may be something to keep in mind…[Read more]

@audrey-caylin Alright; finally getting around to giving you feedback on this. xD And yes, a “climax of a climax” is an actual thing. xD Different writers call it different things, though. Weiland calls it the ‘climactic moment.’

Anyways, onto thoughts on the story. It sounds like Method #2 that’s being utilized since the protagonist is aware of…[Read more]