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@hope Yep. That’s awesome. I like it a lot.

@overcomer
I like this a lot! It has a very fairytale-ish feel (sorry for stealing your words, @ethryndal), which is what I’m sure you were going for. So nice job!
1. Try not to use parentheses as much as you do. Example:

She plopped (rather ungraciously) back down on the divan and patted the spot next to her.

2. It might just be me but using the…[Read more]

@jenali Good for finding an outside-of-the-box example. 😉 Haven’t read the book, but the brief description there sounds like it matches the method!

@jane-maree That looks good and makes a lot of sense to me. 🙂 What parts of your story’s structure are you still wrestling with?

@jenali That looks pretty good. My one concern would be that Brigen should be more seriously considering trusting in the Creator at the midpoint, not at the climax. If he only considers and tries to live this out at…[Read more]

@winter-rose Bringer, Chase, Taliman, Harrison, Grayson

@hope Yes–you can certainly have characters who are antagonists at some points and allies at other points.

Good set of characters. Bryce sounds more like a foil to me. He would be a testing ground if part of Ethaniel’s journey required Ethaniel to move Bryce to his side after Bryce learns about his true heritage. Otherwise, he’s probably going…[Read more]

@hope What @daeus said. It also seems like part of the reason Zevlin dies might be the ongoing poetic justice of his initial negative Experiment in Living? If so, that doesn’t violate those principles since repentance after-the-fact doesn’t always resolve us from the consequences of sin. I would point to the peace Zevlin feels in his sacrifice as…[Read more]

@hope Oh; I like that concept. So basically someone who has a mostly negative EiL, but still have some grasp of the right truth?

@jane-maree *stops charge* Ahem, Frodo wouldn’t have gotten far without Sam. For Sam too! *resumes charge*

@jane-maree *stops charge* Ahem, Frodo wouldn’t have gotten far without Sam.

@jane-maree @winter-rose For the Shire!

@kina-lamb WIP is a Work in Progress, unless you already asked @daeus. 😉
Ah, King George and the Ducky, I love it when Melvin shows up. The song of ‘There Once was a Man’ was great, the tale short and sweet, as well as amusing. Favorite silly song…ouch. Er, I like Bubble Rap, as well as Pizza Angel, His Cheeseburger and all of them besides…[Read more]

@winter-rose @daeus @overcomer @ethryndal @northerner @perfectfifths @kina-lamb @kate-flournoy @the-bean @hope @jane-maree @graciegirl @r-j-wordsmith @allthepeoples
I’m here! I’m here! I know it’s been a while, but I’m here now!

Ear-of-corn and Leg’o’lamb are my favorites.

@perfectfifths Yay! I hope you win!

@kina-lamb Glad you’re liking them! I had fun coming up with the craziest things I could think of. One time I told someone to include dancing butterflies in their WIP. 😛
I was weirded out when I heard that about ‘nice’ as well, but because hardly anyone knows that, I usually just use it anyway. 😛
Celtic whistle is pretty much just my way of…[Read more]

@ethryndal You beat me to it! 😛