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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 1 day ago
@ellette-giselle ohhh cool! yeah Tron’s soundtrack is a great one to have on in the background when you’re writing, or sometimes I put it on when I’m in the car on a long trip.
This is from the TV show, which was pretty god but only lasted like 1 season.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 1 day ago
@ellette-giselle I don’t think you’re playing with demonic powers.
Putting an actual detailed ritual by the Imperial priests could be, for example, but simply the mention that a pagan temple has an evil presence hovering over it is, if anything, as realistic as you can make it.
The music track? Oh, it’s funny cause it is a synth-heavy…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 1 day ago
@ellette-giselle what you said about the temple feeling evil to Joseph makes sense to me. I, personally, have never been to any form of pagan temple (not even the ruins of one, that I can remember anyway) , but honestly the very fact that I would be standing in what was once used for or currently used for the worship of a false god (especially if…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 2 days ago
@rae you–
you actually liked it??
wow.
thank you!
three months of my life weren’t wasted writing this!
My only mental note is it was pretty obvious that Spy was Huntresses and Scouts father from the point that Huntress entered his room and saw his stuff.
This is probably a relic of earlier drafts, in which Huntress figured it out while she…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
Augh, I keep missing you!! 😅
Cool! So… how old is Joseph in the later books, if right now he’s “Young Joseph”?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
How could you kill your FAVORITE off, Ellette??? 😢
Oh, it’s been picked back up. Just slightly bent now. 😁
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
Yeah, I know what you mean.
Lol yeah I totally read it and wondered, but then while I was reading this the only thing that I was thinking was that, “It’s probably the same Julian… right?” I did not even register that until right after, and then I was like 🤦♀️
So because Julian and Joseph showed empathy for Adrian in that sc…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 week, 2 days ago
@loopylin Praying!!! 🙏
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 2 days ago
@rae you were asking about my currently unnamed fanfic
for a fandom I don’t even suggest getting into?? lolnot finished editing it but here, delete the space or something lol
h ttps://docs.google.com/document/d/1SXigHpJueaZyEEgR0myaKj5O-jRh7X2ko6EgxZAy5JM/edit?usp=sharing
I had a link to the same story several pages back on this forum but I…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
You two have some issues with trusting authors. I don’t deserve this at all. What have I ever done to warrant this?! (lol)
I am an author and I don’t trust myself, so there! Lol.
trust me (or don’t haha), we all have done plenty to warrant being very sus of each other. It’s nothing to be ashamed of, or well it kinda is, but is…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
It looks good. I’m still sad though.
Question- how come all the other believers haven’t been discovered, but as soon as Adrian became a believer basically, he was found out and killed?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
Not really crying—but not because I’m not sad. I just don’t really cry that much, even for some of the saddest books I’ve read. I kind of want to though.
You were so bubbly in the previous post, and now you are so sad. Part of me feels really bad, and the other part of me is wickedly gleeful.
I was half convinced you were going t…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
I don’t even know what to say… If you couldn’t tell I posted that before I read the new section.
I don’t even know if I want to see an Adrian aesthetic board anymore 😭😭😭
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
LOL.
Oh 😂 Sorry about that. I wasn’t thinking about the POV shift at all. I guess with Adrian in so many of Joseph’s scenes, I forgot that it’s just Joseph’s POV. @Linus is probably right, you should keep it consistent.
I think you meant to tag @keilah-h up there, because those were her words.
You two have some issues with tr…
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Esther replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 2 days ago
@liberty (moving the convo over here so we don’t spam the short story topic 🤪)
Well, I’m slowly getting back into a rhythm too. I’m starting to write consistently as well. I’m hoping to start working on a WIP. I’ve also started freelancing and am writing for an Amish magazine, which is very exciting! So far, I’ve had one story win 3rd place in th…
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Esther replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 2 days ago
Hey!! I appreciate you reaching out. You’re so sweet! 🤗
Things are going pretty well right now! Volleyball made our schedule crazy over the past six months, so it’s nice now that it’s over and things have slowed down some. I’ve started working on some study rhythms for school to keep my grades up since I fell behind in some lessons…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 2 days ago
even if we’re glad the character didn’t die, it often feels a little artificial.
While I agree with you that maybe killing off Adrian is the best course of action, especially considering this is supposed to be a realistic missionary story, I’ve also seen a story where it’s the opposite: They killed off a character because it…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 week, 2 days ago
Thanks, it’s not that I feel ashamed, it’s that I feel like I am being self absorbed and selfish just asking for prayer for myself.
No, that’s not wrong. Especially in your situation. How many siblings do you have? Are you the youngest, oldest, or in the middle?
I’ll be praying for you. Is there a name I can refer to you…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 2 days ago
I actually didn’t do the last contest, but I’ve been keeping up with this topic anyway. 😛 You picked a really interesting prompt… so I might just participate this time! We’ll see….
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Esther replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 week, 2 days ago
Aw man, that sounds really difficult. I understand annoying siblings, but I can’t imagine how hard it is for you right now. 🫂 I will definitely be praying! <33
And don’t feel bad about asking for prayer! That’s what Christian community is for 🤗
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