KydonAndWillow

@thearcaneaxiom

Thanks for your patience with me! I hope this is a good kickoff to get started. Oh, and excuse my potty mouth😂

Haha! I love this because I can have my characters “swear” in the book without saying actual swear words. I can avoid people thinking the words in their head, and because the made up words have no meaning in reality, I…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I am unsure if I missed a chapter or not. Are we just tossed in with Lilitiu and Sef, or did I miss something important? Anyway, I thought the chapter was great! This line:

They knew for a fact that they were being hunted by the Pythonos,

Feels a bit clunky. But other than that, great!

@mineralizedwritings

Lane

“I’m pleased to make your acquaintance.” Lane said. He fiddled with his skateboard for a few moments, but then set it down near a wall. “Well, no… I wear my hat backwards for… well, fashion sake. In Extroit, the country where I come from, it is extremely popular… even if it’s not very practical.”

Lane looked…[Read more]

@acancello

Ok I see 🙃 (I can bring Lane back over to Hugo if you want! Then they can interact a bit more.)

@savannah_grace2009

Ahh man, I literally just barely missed the next chapter reveal. I guess I’ll have to read it tomorrow🙃

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, I’m finally gonna get through the rest of your chapters:

I enjoyed chapter 3. It functions as a proper first chapter (Lilitu is the real main character, right?), all the previous ones seemed more like a series of prologues. This is fine, The Way of Kings, the first book of the Stormlight Archives by Brandon Sanderson did…[Read more]

@trailblazer

I suppose that’s a working explanation. Where Christ is the solid, the Holy Spirit is the liquid, and Heavenly Father is gas, expressing the hierarchy of God’s physical manifestation. Both solid and liquid are confined to this earth, whereas gas can permeate through all of space. I like that explanation more than the egg one.

Once…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Lol, me too! 🥱 Goodnighty!

@grcr

nice! well, everyone, I have to go now. Nice talking you you all, goodnight!

@acancello @mineralizedwritings

Ok! I made Lane reply to Hugo, but he talks to Kaine next!

Lane

Lane smiled back at Hugo.

“Hi! I’m Lane Shultz. I kinda just walked here while looking for directions to…” He looked around, “well… I’m not quite sure. It does seem that no one knows where we are.”

He shoved his hands in his pockets and looked…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Yeah, I’m a member of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-Day Saints, and we believe that Heavenly Father, the Holy Ghost, and Jesus Christ are three distinct beings, though they are indeed one in purpose. (Please don’t burn me at the stake😅)

I’m not inclined to burn people at the stake, and since I can’t burn anyone through my…[Read more]

@grcr @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @trailblazer @anyone-else

Here’s the 6th chapter! I haven’t posted new ones in a while so I thought I should post my favorite chapter!!!! 😁 It’s really sad but also a little romantic .  Any feedback would be appreciated!

Chapter 6: Hiding

Triggers: Abuse, a punch

“Sef!”

Sef heard the door crash open upst…[Read more]

@jonas @esther-c @highscribeofaetherium @trailblazer @anyone-else (if you don’t want to read it that’s fine so just because I tagged you doesn’t mean you have to 😁

Next chapter:

Chapter 6: Hiding

Triggers: Abuse

“Sef!”

Sef heard the door crash open upstairs and began to panic. It was late, and the odds that Iver had not been drinking were nex…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Ok!! I’ll make him answer Kaine… One second…

@savannah_grace2009

lol. 😅

@grcr

Gotcha. I have to get off at 9, so we basically both have a half hour 😂