Kate Flournoy

Your mom is in the kitchen preparing to can her special recipe of cinnamon apples.

You come into the kitchen and notice the brilliant red solution she has prepared to soak the apples in.

Your first thought is POISON.

You know you’re a writer.

Hm… try giving the floor a character. Benign. Gentle. Winning. Peaceful. ‘Don’t be fooled by the floor’s peaceful looks…’

I don’t know, what do you think?

Makes sense. Got it completely.

Hm. But I thought that was all a given.

It is, after all, called… get this… a cliffhanger.

That pr-etty much sums it up.

In my opinion.

Which has been wrong on more than one occasion. 😛

But how much is too much and how tense is too tense?
I don’t think you should leave off with absolutely NOTHING…[Read more]

*Bites nails, hovers on edge of seat and tears and frazzled hair* Come on Ezra! What were you going to say? Huh? HUH!? Tell me!!!!!! I WANNA KNOW! Don’t leave me in suspense!!!!!!!!!!

OOOOOOOOOOhhhhhhhhhhhhhh… wait. I get it now.

It was a cliff hanger. 😛

XD. Niiiiiiiiiiiiiice, Ezra.

Perhaps you would condescend to enlighten me, Daniel.

@Daeus— no, it’s actually by an author who has a lot of similarities with Douglas Bond— John J. Horn. Have you heard of him?

Okay, thanks for explaining your cliffhanger. That makes sense too. I see what you’re saying.

Thanks for joining us, @Ezra-wilkinson! Ahem… I trust you have something to contribute…?

😉

Good thoughts, @hope!

@Daeus, it sounds like you might be talking about ending on a cliffhanger right in the middle of an action scene. That’s probably not a good idea, because everything has been going at such a fast pace that an end will fall on you like a thunderclap and leave you screaming without any motivation to go on. Because, if anyone…[Read more]

Oh my, this brings back so many memories! I used to do this ALL THE TIME when I was younger, only it wasn’t lava— it was a river full of poisonous leeches. 😛

I noticed a few lines that could have flowed better. For one,

Balancing on the wall trimming works for a bit

Try ‘To walk on the wall trim will work for a bit’

Also,

Guys, that…

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Yes! I am. Word limits are the bane of my existence, but it’s good to practice squeezing as much meaning as you can into as few words as possible. It’ll improve us in the end.

At least, that’s a good thing to tell myself.

You got it. That works great.

Okay. I’ll play around with it and see what I can come up with. Thanks!

Hahahahahaha! That’s what you call short and sweet right there, Hope. Setting. Conflict. Climax. Resolution.

That’s your basic story.

Thanks @Daeus! Hm… I’m not sure what I could add to that line. Any suggestions?

Glad you like it, Hope! I see what you’re saying, definitely, but about the sword, ‘Sharpness’ was supposed to slant rhyme with ‘Darkness’. Any suggestions to get around this?

Um… maybe some sort of infrared vision goggles? Something like the Navy Seals have (at least I think it’s the Navy Seals)— the goggles that detect body heat and send back images through walls based solely on the heat they’re picking up. That could be cool.

Thanks, @sarah-h! I’ll post the revised version and see if I got all the kinks out.

The Coming Dawn

Long we have stood
In the shadow and mist;
Deep is the darkness
Around us.
Black is the night,
And hard is the road,
And cruel are the foes
That surround us.
Hard is our fate,
And bitter our lot,
And cold is the night
And the darkness.
The…[Read more]

Yes! Me too! It’s almost become an unspoken contest to see who can read books like that the most dramatically. 😀
The only problem is, when everybody else starts laughing, you start laughing, and then you can’t keep reading!