Cloaked Mystery

Tagging some people! I know this was created a while ago but we really do need a solid world building thread.

@calyhuge @folith-feolin @otherworldlyhistorian @godlyfantasy12 (yes I am still consistently tagging u) @keilah-h @jonas @rae

@jonas

Oh no XD

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

You guys have already read the next chapter, the one where Lilitu steals the loaf of bread. So I’ll skip to the fourth chapter, when Lilitu’s walking home from his thievery, lol

And as always, don’t feel like you have to read it. I don’t want anybody panicking, lol

Chapter 4: Strange Magick

Lilitu stood at the edge of…[Read more]

@jonas

“A hero is the one who bleeds, red drops that fall like planter’s seeds.”

@jonas

you’re fine!! no worries! 🙂

@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009

The biggest thing I noticed for critiquing was that it was kinda confusing with all the characters who was doing what. I got lost on who the soldiers were and who the slaves were in the first few paragraphs and kinda got lost on what everyone was doing whilst reading.

Yeah, I was a little worried about…[Read more]

@jonas ok!

@thearcaneaxiom @jonas

I like this chapter as well!

Thanks!

Yeah, I just wanted the chapter to end on an emotional climax. I kind of wanted short chapter breaks, because I don’t like it how in books some authors make like 40 page long chapters. I kind of like it in two different chapters for some reason.

@savannah_grace2009 @jonas

I was thinking the same thing actually. They’re both pretty short, so perhaps you could add a chapter break, but even that isn’t necessary. I know why you did it, in order to have the chapter end on a good emotional climax, so I’d say you can do it either way, but it can still function as one whole scene.

@thearcaneaxiom @jonas

Here’s chapter 2, if you can’t read it today, that’s fine.

Chapter 2: Euphoria

Sef’s hands flew to her mouth to stifle a scream.

She wanted to sing, scream, cry, dance for joy.

Her mother was not sick. And she was going to have a little brother or sister!

“Really?” Sef squeaked, smiling so hard her cheeks ached, and t…[Read more]

@jonas

It’s fun, because you can also use the same flavor of voice to do Wall-E and Stitch.

@savannah_grace2009 @euodia-vision @jonas @rae

Do it lol

😆

h ttps://www.mote.com/m/darsdx5 (delete the space after the h)

Let me know if it doesn’t work.

@thearcaneaxiom

Speaking of playing Gollum well, who thinks they can do a really good Gollum voice?

I cannot do a good Gollum voice but I have some friends that are pretty good at it.

@jonas

Speaking of the Gollum voice, did anyone know Andy Serkis had to drink a special drink to avoid ruining his voice or something? They called it ‘Gollum j…

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@jonas

Should I post the next one later today, or wait until tomorrow?

@jonas

four appearing at once would be panic inducing, lol.

Inserts “panik” meme

lol

@jonas

Thanks! I was actually really happy with this scene, I think it’s one of my best.

Yes, it would be Sef and Lilitu’s book. I have four chapters of that one so far, but I didn’t want to spam you guys, lol.

Yeah, I was planning to do either Neveah or Ottoline for the “teaser”, though Neveah’s would make more sense.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @anyone-else

So here’s the first chapter of my revisions to the Andromeda book…ready for critiquing!

Chapter 1: New Beginnings

Newborn light sifted between the windows, piercing the darkness.

Through the smudged glass, Sef could see the Andromedan sunrise, she could see the indigo trees dancing as the wind pushed them…[Read more]

@jonas

Okay, sounds good!

@savannah_grace2009 @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @anyone-reading-this

This RP needs to get active again.