Cloaked Mystery

@jonas

I take it this chapter is before some of the ones you already wrote, since it shows them preparing to leave the house? Or are they moving a second time?

Huh? I’m confused. They’re moving a second time. They never moved the first time, because they already lived in Wrallethom Heights before the Pythonos made everyone else move there too. So…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

No, you’re fine!!!

I just can never seem to think things through before I say them! I reply too fast…

Thanks for helping me, this gave me a lot to think about! (you too @jonas !) Today I developed sooo much of the plot thanks to you guys!

No it wasn’t your mistake, it was MY mistake…I still feel bad for confusing everybody…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @jonas

But there’s a problem there. When we chose to live in sin, or even directly comit evil, there is still hope for us until death. Even the vilest of sinner can be redeemed by the blood of Christ. If you make Pythonos unredeemable, you are almost saying that the blood of Christ is not enough for them. You know? Which is why r…

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@jonas

Ok, I could agree with that. The people do need to be redeemable though.

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks @jonas

Yeah, I think we just hit the major plot-hole. I think you need something between Pythonos and people. You see, even the most depraved of people do not become demons. They can certainly become demon possessed, but they themselves will not become demons. And Christ has the power to cast out demons. (I can find…[Read more]

@jonas

Lilitu was kind of my “you’re never too far gone” person, because his parents are Jraldath and Selena! There’s going to be this epic confrontation scene where he wrestles with the knowledge that he was meant to be evil from the moment he was born. Does that work? Or do I still need Cassian?

Because that’s a good idea, but I feel like…[Read more]

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Chapter 14

A New Adventure

Sef stood in the kitchen, tears pricking behind her eyes.

The house was so empty…so vacant. It felt wrong.

Her heavy pack dug into her shoulders, an ever present reminder o…[Read more]

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@jonas

This phrasing sounds a bit awkward.

I’m cringing…

WHYYY

apparently I didn’t edit it as well as I thought…

Ooops yeah I’ll fix that.

That’s a lot of “that”s.

NOOOO I’M CRINGING AGAIN

what was I thinking?!? I just committed a crime…to use the same word three times in a sentence…how could I?!?!

By this point, you’ve managed to conv…

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Ok, I’ve been playing around with the front cover to The Space Between Us. What…[Read more]

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Jonathan just got himself into a bad situation if anyone is…[Read more]

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Chapter 8

Monster

What am I doing?

Frustration built up in Lilitu’s chest until he wanted to scream.

But he couldn’t scream….or else Adar would find him.

Cass isn’t going to come bail you out this time, he pressed his lips together in a thin line. You have to figure it out yourself.

He tried to find a comfort…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ummmmmm

There’s more sad where that came from

heh…heh…

@jonas

Okay, I’ll have Cassian say something XD it will probably trigger Lilitu’s temper though lol

Yeah…it is…

Don’t worry you guys, I’m not just being dark to be dark, there is a purpose behind it!!!! Just wait haha

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Would anyone like to see the cover of my newest book I’m about…[Read more]

@jonas

you want an em dash instead of a hyphen

Noted. Thank you!!!

Maybe this will be explained at some point, but it isn’t clear why the Paynes being moved to this new district would mean she doesn’t see them anymore, did they just move to completely different areas?

She doesn’t see them anymore because both she and them are always working, the…[Read more]

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btw, If anyone would be willing, I have a WIP for a 5th draft that I am trying to wrap up for publishing. I would love some f…[Read more]

CONGRATS to @kyronthearcanin!!! She is now PUBLISHED!!!!!! 🎉🎊🎉🎊🎉🎉

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Ok, so for anyone who read the first chapter. Jonathan’s brother has been taken away to Academy (as was shown) and this is a day or so later. not much happened in that time that would…[Read more]