Cloaked Mystery

@ellette-giselle

Haha you’re good!

But question–  do you think it’s too dark?

Huh I don’t know if you tagged me or not, I’ll look at it sometime today!!! 👍👍

@rae

And you can rip apart my writing too XD XD

@rae

In my opinion, just don’t think of him as a “hero” when he sacrifices himself. You can still keep him the same, just don’t think of him the same way.

Idk if this is making sense…

I tried lol

@theshadow

You’re good!!!! Haha thanks for wanting to read it!!!

@everyone

Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD

@savannah_grace2009 @loopylin @whalekeeper

exactly. If I am portraying it wrong, I need to change it. I just don’t want to change it yet because something has changed inside of Chase, and I need to figure out what it is first. That was what I was trying to say.

@keilah-h

Are you ready to post a description?

I’m sorry, I’m just excited to draw one of your charries 🙂

Chapter 13

Decay

“Sssef! I’m not paying you to ssstand there doing nothing,” the Pythonos’s voice carried, snapping her back to attention.

“Yes sir,” she lowered her head, her cheeks flushing with embarrassment as her fellow workers all looked up from their work.

Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she turned back to the pile of trash. I…[Read more]

@rae

I don’t think anyone was saying that you need to change Chase. Like Loopy and Whaley said, it’s not bad that he has that flaw, because he’s a flawed character that grows and changes in your story. We were just concerned that you were portraying him as more of a hero and that flaw was celebrated.

@whalekeeper @loopylin correct me if I’m wrong…XD

@loopylin @whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009

I blame all of you for the lack of sleep last night XD. Seriously, what Loopy said had me thinking.

I understand your concerns, but as of now, I’m not going to change anything with Chase and just keep him going on the path I have laid so far. The reason is there’s something different in Chase. I haven’t…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Sure! Come join us!

@whalekeeper

Hahaha 🤣🤣🤣

@whalekeeper

Thanks girl, that makes me feel a lot better 💗💗💗

You’re the best Whaley!!! <3

You literally ALWAYS know what to say!!! (:

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]

@loopylin

I’m listening to it now XD XD

@theshadow

hey, I know you read the first couple chapters! I’d love to hear your thoughts/critiques on the recent chapters if you have any! But if you’re busy I totally get it, summer can be soooo hectic!

Instead of digging through all these posts, you can use this link to view the whole novel (what I’ve revised so…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any other thoughts on the chapters you’ve read?