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@leumeister  Of those two I would pick Tristan — I like that name (if I haven’t mentioned before) 🙂

@mariposa  Well, sci-fi doesn’t have anything to do with KP, soooooooooo…

@mariposa  AAAH! Don’t steal my thunder!!!!

It’s still awesome! 😉

@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀

@epicaddie2 Continuing to pray! <3

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

@leumeister I like Camille, Raphael, and Tristan. Tristan is one of my favorite names!

@amy-l-klob  You’re very welcome! Yes, exactly! I love how deep it sounds, her normal life being “separated” from her. I have to agree that a good background is essential for that!

Anyway, I’m glad I could help! What is your novel about, if I may ask? (If not, that’s okay 🙂 )

@daughteroftheking  Thank you!! Good to know I’m not the only nerd here! B-)

Good point! Not a lot of people would want the “gollums goll’ming…” Or the “Daleks screaming” XD Well, I suppose the light sabers are good for that! 😛

@seekjustice  Are you still around?

@perfectfifths  Naw I’m just finishing up the scene 🙂

@catwing Good night!

Greetings, @amy-l-klob!!

How to begin a novel. *scratches chin* Hmmmmmm…

It makes sense why you want to do that! The reader does need to know the background of the protagonist.

I think you should kick off the first chapter like right before the action happens, around the time when the conflict comes in. Like, the protagonist is coming home…[Read more]

Greetings, @catwing! Coming back to an older story! An old flame, eh? (get it? Ok that was some awkward wording…)

@seekjustice  I’m all right. Very, very unmotivated though 😛

@alia  It’s going okay. It’s hard not to overuse verbs of being though! My teacher found billions! Personally I don’t find much wrong with verbs of being, but…. *shrug* 🙂

I love it when characters do that! It’s a good change! 😀