Janellebelovedpig

@theshadow

Here’s the next one. I wonder what happened to Sara. She had said she had some thoughts, but it looks like she vanished. lol. Let me know what you think!

 
Chapter 12
“Ignatius, what’s going on?” demanded Julius.

“I’m doing what I came to do all along. It took me a while to wonder about without your guidance, but I managed. It seems…[Read more]

@theshadow here you go! Sorry it took a sec!

 
Chapter 11
Julius stood staring out of his window. It was not fully dark yet, and he was having a hard time waiting. After almost two months, he would finally come face to face with Marcus again. It seemed like they had been separated by a lifetime. Julius didn’t know what to expect. Love for his f…[Read more]

@theshadow

That’s right where I want you. XD

Keep an eye out, I’m about to post the next chapter.

@rae

I understand the feeling, like you’re barging into a stranger’s house when you’re new here,

YES!!!! Or also when you step into a room of people and see a group who are obvoiusly all friends and all know each other, and they are talking and having a good time, and you like, “i would really like to join them, but I also don’t know them and I…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome. I’ll make sure to keep that in mind.

Wait a second. I didn’t. How did I forget that I did not forget your tag?

Oops, how did I forget your tag? @theshadow

@theshadow

So…I think it’s a really good idea. I mean, this is a dark world, although it’s not as dark as the world you might be writing about. But it’s still riddled with sin. I think that writing a book around horrible topics might just allow the goodness of God to shine through even more strongly–just like how a light is brighter in a dark…[Read more]

@theshadow

Okay, but this makes me think Ignatius is trying to arrest Marcus…

Now someone is starting to get tangled in the is-he-is-he-not? phase. Love it!!

the colosseum scene was the best part

NICE! NAILED IT!! I’m so happy that you liked it. I’m also really glad that it was your favorite. It was my favorite too.

@theshadow

Oooo, this is gonna be fun!! I’ll have to get to him this afternoon! I’ll probably have him for you by tomorrow at the latest. (unless something crazy happens over here. lol)

Thank you for sending him! I love drawing for people!

@rae

Hello, someone tagged me yesterday and it went to this chatline, but now I can’t find out who tagged me. lol. I’ve been reading this last page and this looks interesting! Ya mind if I join y’all? If y’all want me, what goes on over here on this chatline?

@rae

Awesome!!! I wrote for 10 hours, but had to get off to run some errands with my dad. Hmm, challenges. I think on that.

@theshadow

Oh, btw, here is a trick that helps with writers block. Write 500 words a day. Just do it. (Sunday can be an exception) but write 500 words a day. you may come back and delete that scene later on, but it…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

WHYYY

@whalekeeper

Thank you for everything Whaley!! This means a lot <3

Both ways work well!! Whatever makes more sense to you; I’m just throwing random ideas to help you brainstorm

Ohhhh gotcha! Thanks XD

I think what Jonas was mentioning (please correct me if I’m wrong!) is before, there was some moral grayness and room for human variation, esp…

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@theshadow

Well…look at my novel!

It has several dark elements, like child abuse, child neglect/abandonment, murder, evil guys running the world, hatred, prison camps, etc.

But the reason these elements are in my story is because my story is an allegory about Light and Darkness, good and evil!

I think your story is fine (unless you’re…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

The greatest enjoyment I got from the prologue was the twist from ‘we’re doing this to save the baby’ to ‘what’s this baby doing here?’ That was great.

Really?!?! That’s awesome…I guess I’m keeping it now XD XD

You should think about how strong of an allegory you want. Once you say Jesus, all readers will know this is a Christian a…

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@jonas

Wow…this is a lot to think about and really helpful! Thank you!!

I don’t think there’s anything wrong with it as it is, it really evokes a certain mood, and has really strong imagery.

Okay good XD

Yeah, the first line of the book is always the hardest because that’s how the readers decide whether or not to keep reading!

These three par…

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@theshadow

Ok, my essential thoughts: this is a dark world. I mean man, it’s dark, depraved, sick, evil, black, and desperate. it is ONLY because of God that there is any hope at all. I tend to write about a lot of dark stuff, i.e. persecution of the Christians in the roman times, child brainwashing in dystopian era, outlawing of Christianity,…[Read more]

Aaand chapter ten. Now i gotta go! Enjoy!

 
Chapter 10
“God take my life
I offer myself to you now
And I shall everyday
Cherish your name

God, you use my hands
To help the people
And you use my feet
So that I may bring your words
God, you use my voice
So that I may praise you all the time
And you use my mouth
So that I may tell your words

You…[Read more]

@theshadow

Note: There is no description in this one of the courtyard because the description would be in the chapter before.

 
Chapter 9
Julius pulled his cloak closer. It was nearing the end of summer, and the night air had a decided chill. It would be curfew soon, and Julius would have to hurry. He slipped through the gate and began his…[Read more]