Janellebelovedpig

@ellette-giselle

Huh…interesting!

@savannah_grace2009

I read super fast too, which is why I would like to know what the world is like so I can concentrate on the plot. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

(Sorry I took forever to reply!! Life has been busy and I’m doing the King’s Daughters’ Writing Camp this month)

Lukas

Lukas bit his lip, his gaze roaming the ground as if searching for an answer in the dirt. “W-well, I don’t think H-He’d just stop listening…” he wet his lips. “B-but I can pray for you if-if you want.”…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

well, I can say personally that I get annoyed with books that have a complex plot and also make you figure out what the world is and whats going on. I would really prefer to know more. It could be informative where you just tell the reader, or it could be something like one of the kids asking a question and an adult explaining…

[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Alriiight, Chapter 1. Please tell me if you get overwhelmed with all the feedback, because if that happens, I will gladly pause.

I was overwhelmed a bit, but you don’t have to pause, I just needed a day to process everything haha!

Sooo I get this weird feeling about Nico. I’m not entirely convinced he doesn’t love them, nor do I kno…

[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Actually it was “Cassian ran, trying to outrun time itself”

Oh, whoops. sorry!

I used to try explain everything in the first few chapters but got told I was info dumping….

So now I’m too scared to go back, and I don’t know how to explain everything without doing that!

Help???

well, I can say personally that I get annoyed w…[Read more]

@jonas

Ugh…I feel like I keep saying things I will regret later XD

Why are you so good at this??? You need to be an editor someday lol

I do have one more question regarding this. If the Andromedans so universally despise and hate Paynes, then where do you get the people who are willing to marry a human and become Paynes themselves?

Before the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

The only thing I would say was when it said Cassian “ran, trying to outrun himself”

Actually it was “Cassian ran, trying to outrun time itself”.

That still might grate a little bit because of ran/outrun, so I changed it a little bit.

Also, from the perspective of someone who doesn’t know the full story and really is like a reade…

[Read more]

@everyone

Sorry for not getting back to you guys! I admit I did get a little overwhelmed…WHY ARE THERE SO MANY HOLES IN MY STORY LIKE DOES IT SUCK THAT MUCH????

Such is life XD

Don’t worry…you guys are helping me a lot! I’m a sensitive person and writing’s something really close to my heart so when I get all these things I’m doing wrong I…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I read the last two chapters and that hit me hard too!!!

I almost cried….😭😭😭💔💔

I’m kinda cheering right now, even though I know that sounds really bad……..

I need to read it all the way through again!

Wow!! Really? That’s awesome!

So, what is your opinion on the end? should I leave it unknown like it is?

Thank you so m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I read the last two chapters and that hit me hard too!!!

I almost cried….😭😭😭💔💔

I need to read it all the way through again!

You have a beautiful story and I can’t wait to see what God does with it!

(And I understand perfectly about why you started before Marcus converted, it makes sense now!)

@freed_and_redeemed

Ahhhh!! I decided to go back to the beginning and scroll through all of the pages to find more about Riker and Leon, because I was intrigued. OH MY GOODNESS!!!! Ahh, I have to know more! I weeded through 100 pages and I need all the story! Please get this published, and if you have, tell me where to buy it!! I love what I’ve…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Awesome!!! I can’t wait!!

Your drawing of Shadow’s character looks sooo good!

Thank you!!

Hello!

Happy 4th of July everyone!

@theshadow

THATS THE ENDING?! Nononono it can’t be the ending right?! Julius chose to die right?!

Well……. I had a crazy idea to leave it like that with no one ever knowing. However….. I can add one sentence that will change the entire ending and then you would know the answer to that. However, I also liked the unknown ending as well. what i…[Read more]

@theshadow

So that is the end. I await your reply……….. and possible outrage. lol. However, I have to kick off to do some stuff, so I’ll prob. get back tomorrow morning.

@theshadow

Chapter 16

Julius closed his eyes tightly. How did they do that? How could they face death so unafraid?

Ignatius voice broke in through his thoughts. “They walked out there was taking a twilight stroll. I must admit, the courage of these Christians is impressive.”

Julius felt sick. He could still hear the lion roaring out the…[Read more]

@theshadow

Thank you! I’m glad it was good. I’m also glad it hit hard, because I wanted it to, ya know. Chapter 16 is almost done.

@theshadow Here you go!

 
Chapter 15
The cheers and stamping of the crowd sounded like thunder above them. Flavia flinched at the sound and clung to Marcus’ hand. Marcus swallowed hard and looked up at the roof above them. He knew the people were waiting up there, feeding their lust for blood and violence on the gladiator fights. From somewhere n…[Read more]

@theshadow

Sigh, it’s another game of will-he-won’t-he

I know. I just love those. *sighs happily*

I have to brush my sister’s hair, and then I should just about have this next chapter ready for you!