Janellebelovedpig

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

One afternoon, Aaron was sitting on the edge of his bed, studying his Bible, when Noah stepped into the room, a Bible in his own hands. “Aaron, can I talk to you?”

“Yeah sure,” said Aaron, motioning to the bed.

Noah sat down. “Aaron, I was reading through the Bible, cover to cover as you sugge…

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@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

At last, the curfew was slowly lifted and the citizens were allowed to return to a more normal life. Never were they allowed to leave the city. The Imperial soldiers began causing problems, turning families out of their homes to accommodate the Officers. All of the large building taken to quarter…

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@mineralizedwritings

Wow, it sounds like you’ve got an awesome family!

The best in my opinion. 😀

Yeah, I understand, and thank you for the support. Sorry if I misunderstood you.

@linus-smallprint

Noah knew he was dead, he just didn’t know that Aaron was there when he died. Does that section need to be re-written to make that a little clearer? He’s not confused, he just was asking Aaron why he didn’t tell them that he had to see it happen. That’s rough, you know? You can’t just bury that one.

Yes, he did write in his…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, honestly, if you were to show some good parental interaction along with the bad, and show as the author that you don’t believe the while children know best thing, then I think you’re set.

Oh that’s awesome! I bet that was so fun to see her again! And her husband too. Hope you had a great time! I’ll probably have to cut…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Yeah, They haven’t been for a while. We transferred ours to canva or google photos and shared the links on here. I think that would be best. Or do you have a share link on the platform you use to draw?

@mineralizedwritings

But it’s not my “morals for writing” it’s the fact that I created a badly done character and the males in my life were able to point that out! And even then, it’s not so much my writing they talk about as much as hearing them talk about other badly done males from movies and books. I value their opinion just as much, or…[Read more]

@calyhuge

Awesome!

Thank you so much! This feedback has been amazing!

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

here we go. Again, love feedback on Aaron here. I’m feeling pretty confidant, so it might all come crashing down. XD

The next evening found Aaron on his knees again. He found he was spending a lot of time that way, and he wasn’t finding any peace. Every night he cried out questions, and never o…

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@mineralizedwritings

Yes, he does. Silver hilted when he’s a prince, and gold hilted with a sapphire settings when he’s a king.

@mineralizedwritings

awesome! I can’t wait to see these!!!!!!

@keilah-h

(also…..LOL the bit about the phone dying, that’s a trope in EVERY story where you have a leader who has to communicate with your characters from a distance)

I know! 😀

there was literally a seen when Phil’s brother Andy was like, “Hang on Phil, before we don ANYTHING check your battery.”

@keilah-h

Yeah, completely. I just can’t stand the hidden message of kids know best in just about every adventure movie or book. And Box car kids and Hardyboys literally got chucked across the room because I was SICK of the kids know everything.

There is a series, The Baker Family Adventures, that is a breath of fresh air!! It’s about a…[Read more]

@keilah-h

that was by FAR my favorite episode!! SOOOOOO good!!! like, gave me chills kind of good!!

@keilah-h

I’m glad you liked it! Yeah, it is sad. Poor Edwin. and poor Turin of course. Poor Sabina too!

And the “feeling like he’s a failure, stemming from pride” actually makes a weird amount of sense.

I know right?

@linus-smallprint

Yup. Sure is, and the funny thing is, if you told him he was being prideful he’d look at you like you were crazy. He thinks that he’s a failure at the moment, and he’s not realizing that this stems from his pride.

@linus-smallprint

This is a realistic reaction from Aaron. He sees himself as a failure and has suddenly had more responsibility shoved on to him than he thought he would get. He does not feel ready and hides, lest he bring down others with him.

Yes! And, (spoiler kinda) he’s unintentionally beginning to see himself as Ardenta’s savior which is…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

but she will refuse to read anything I write until I improve my grammar.

Do I know what that’s like or what! lol.

I can’t say to much about this at the moment, but for now, know that this is nec for the story.

Ok…… I trust you.

Maybe.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper

k, here’s a new part.

@calyhuge @otherworldlyhistorian @thearcaneaxiom @linus-smallprint

Apologies for tagging y’all. Hope you don’t mind. I’ve started employing the advice y’all gave me, and I wanted to see what you fella’s think before I go any farther with it. Does Aaron still seem like a guy. I mean, would…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

This was great!!!

Suspicion: Alan’s father can control himself because he’s actually one of the Faithful. (Just a thought.)

Oh dear…… man…… I don’t know what to say. I mean, the grammar in there…… well some of it’s a little painful. lolol. I think I’m dso sensitive because I am bad at grammar so I’m always…[Read more]