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@keilah-h

Ikr! My dad loves that one. So do my brothers.

@rae

Alright then!!

@linus-smallprint

That’s because I forgot about that one.

HAHA! that makes sense. I was trying to figure out what you changed. lol.

Just for fun, if either of you has soundtrack suggestions for my book, let me know.

ooo, will do!!

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, I like the Charles song!!

@linus-smallprint

WAY BETTER!

Ok, the magic thing is a little fuzzy still. I read it over several times and I think I have a good idea to where you could fix the whole thing very simply but make it so the reader understands using magic to stop from shattering wasn’t right.

“As time went by, we grew to love the power we had and started to allow o…

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@linus-smallprint

Reading now. Feedback in a sec

@loopylin @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings

Yeah, I mean, I personally prefer that whoever I’m talking to would make eye contact as well, or at least try to. But as long as they’re not like, staring at the floor or clearly not even looking at me, then I’m not offended or anything.

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@linus-smallprint

Honestly, that was the obligation I felt writing this, so no wonder you picked that up from reading it.

lol. It felt like it.

I think your dad has some really good advice. I would go with that.

@highscribeofaetherium

No problem.

@highscribeofaetherium

Should I wait on a drawing from you, or are you planning to skip this round?

@rae

Am I getting an updated drawing from you, or would you like to use the one you already submitted?

@linus-smallprint

Hmm. I didn’t want to dwell too long on it, since both the reader and Alan want to hear Charles’s story more. But I wanted to include this as well, because, like I said, a fantasy book telling you not to read fantasy books would just be weird. Perhaps I have room to fit in more here? I could also try coming back to this lat…

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Hmm. I didn’t want to dwell too long on it, since both the reader and Alan want to hear Charles’s story more. But I wanted to include this as well, because, like I said, a fantasy book telling you not to read fantasy books would just be weird. Perhaps I have room to fit in more here? I could also try coming back to this later. I’m also conce…

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@linus-smallprint

 Anyway, I think he needs some pointy ears and a ridiculous amount of equipment on his back, eh?

😠

No.

Nope.

Not happening.

lol

@rae

Oh, also, I’m gonna ask someone to stop us if we get too heated. I have a tendency to do this when I really get the ball rolling. ellette-giselle If Whaley agrees, would you mind?

Yes, I can kill this if I need to, though it looks like so far y’all have kept your heads. lol

@freed_and_redeemed

I wasn’t necessarily saying that…… Well, now that I think about it I actually am saying God should be there.

See, the big issue for me was that Rae said that her character found joy and peace and I was wondering where he found that if it wasn’t from God.

@linus-smallprint @grcr

Thanks y’all!

@keilah-h

I had a forum where I offered to draw people’s characters, but it kinda died. 🙁

We could bring it back to life!

@keilah-h

Of course!! You can draw as many of my characters as you like!! One of my favorite things is seeing people’s drawings of my characters.

@linus-smallprint

It’s very good, but the whole reading fantasy seemed like you started to go into it and then pulled back and skirt5ed the whole problem. I feel like if it’s going to be there at all it needs more. At the moment it feels kinda like “Why?” If you have nothing more to say on the matter, I would consider cutting it.

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