Janellebelovedpig

@linus-smallprint

@hybridlore wants me to save Eric.

What are your thoughts?

@hybridlore

i don’t know.

Maybe.

I’ll think about it.

@linus-smallprint

I sure don’t enjoy it.

Do you think it’s fine as long as this is the last one……. (for a while.)

@linus-smallprint

Kind of. I did get a little hope, but when the mood switched I thought, “Okay. Here we go again. Do we have to be here for this?”

Oh.

I thought you said to go ahead and kill them.

Do you think it wasn’t good?

@linus-smallprint

i think so. He’s in the barn talking to martha

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol.

And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.

Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.

Yes, and I have a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?

Ooo, I haven’t thought of this really.

Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.

Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

As for the actual plot of everything, I really like what you did with the crow there. Ties in nicely. I’m curious as to what the king’s doing. Is he trying to help Alan? It may be that because he was interested in Alan’s success, he ordered the arrests of the Faithful in order to get rid of one of the wizard’s obstacles. But…[Read more]

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NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Joseph sat at the table and stared at his plate. Noah and Darrien had already eaten and were pulling on their boots. They knew the hard day of work they had ahead, and they had been able to eat

Sabina put her arm over Joseph’s sh…

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@linus-smallprint

Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!!

AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!

Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.

Also, one…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Woah, are you accusing me of being a sadist?

lololololol.

Thanks I’ll check it out!

@linus-smallprint

YEEEESSSS!!!!!

STRIPE HAS BEEN HUGGED!!!!

*does a happy dance*

I’m no longer surprised when a character is taken/died. In fact, I was expecting it any time now. That’s not good.

Is it though? I mean sure, in modern storytelling that is a thing to reserve for smacking readers with, but could the fact that no one is safe almost be a shock in in of itself? Maybe I’ve read too much from early church histo…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

thanks so much for this feedback.

im not going to say anything so as not to shed light on which path i take, but i will say that it was extremely helpful knowing your thoughts.

thanks again!

@linus-smallprint

Why was I expecting this to be something positive?

You should know me better than that.

It kind of made the event feel like a slap. (Ouch. I’m feeling Josephs pain.)

Perfect! That’s exactly what I wanted.

It also feels more tragic because of how casually Eric and Asher headed out. It was just a normal day.

Ah yes. Poor b…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

@hybridlore

Drat.

KP isn’t letting me know that y’all responded!

Grrr.

Hmm, it looks like I really stirred it up around here. lol.

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Sorry it’s so short.

Joseph woke. For a long moment he lay, trying to figure out what was happening and where he was. He had been so exhausted he didn’t even remember lying down. There was an odd sound, a sound he knew he had heard many times be…

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@grcr

Many that live deserve death. And some that die deserve life.

~J.R.R. Tolkien.

@grcr

Oh.

Wow.

I didn’t even know you were reading.

Hmmm.

Why shouldn’t I kill them?

@power

I’m sorry, what?