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#4: I think my issue is that it’ll actually be really, really easy to find the new identity Jean is using unless literally every single government database storing identity information is compromised. Caderousse knows that Jean came here to get a new identity so she knows that a record change has been made. To identify the false…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Yay, I think I like this prologue much better. It introduces the central conflict and immediately sillhows what the story will be a modern, futuristic retelling of Les Mis, which I think will be what a reader that picks up your book will be expecting.

A few points:

#1: Since the POV is meant to be omnescient, the shift in focus is…[Read more]

@seekjustice I’ll have to read it later tonight.  I’ve got to go now for a while I think. 🙁

@seekjustice  Which one?

Oh, and sorry I never came back to beta-reading SFI. I lost the notes page you emailed me and then life happened annnnd. . . yeah. So sorry. 😛 🙁

@valtmy  Sounds tedious. 😛

I’m doing more fan stuff. As usual.

@seekjustice It took a while, but I found it! 😛  You said you had no idea where the pairing between Rain and Kendall came from?  Here’s the quote from your first draft:

I felt myself drifting off to sleep, the grass prickling my neck and tickling my ear. Then I smiled. “Hey, Rain, you’ve got a thing for Kendall, don’t you?”…

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@seekjustice

There isn’t a link?

@dekreel

Hello. I’m working on my WIP. Got stuck for a while before I realised that it does not make sense for the scene I am writing to go the way I had planned so I am doing backtracking.

@rochellaine  @valtmy  @seekjustice  @alia  @ariel-ashira  @jenwriter17  @anyone

I think I’ll try to hack away this plot hole a bit. How are y’all doing? 🙂

@seekjustice

Haha your book is not even published yet and you are already pandering to the fanbase? 😛

Yes, Kendall really, really needs to be developed more. If removing all romantic hints is needed for that, I’ll say go for it. You are already in a dilemma regarding the genre of SFI, right? 😛 (Whether or not it should be a dystopian or not).…[Read more]

@seekjustice I will admit, had Rain in the first draft been carrying a torch for Quillon, it’s very likely I would have liked it that way.  I think I may have told you this before.

Ohh…do you picture “carrying the torch” as “carrying the flashlight” since you’re Australian?  I just thought of that…and it’s a very disturbing thought. 😛 (You d…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Hi. Yes, I’m still around. Unfortunately, I’ve been sick 🙁 (But I promise I am still working on Part 3 of QOD, @seekjustice so do not worry!)

@seekjustice

Sure, I’d love to take a look. 🙂

As for your character pairings… Apart from Chessy’s silly crush, I honestly don’t have much of an opinion on that matter actually since I don’t really think of SFI as a romance so I did not read it as such.

Usually for romances what I like to see is two people coming together, supporting each…[Read more]

@valtmy Hello!  I didn’t get a chance to say hi before dinner happened. 🙂  Are you still here?  How are you doing?

@seekjustice

I think that’s where my perspective is different from others.  I would possibly represent the readers who have not read/do not know well the story of Les Miserables as I had but once skimmed through Les Mis a while before I read the first draft of Stars, and did not notice the connection, so I viewed it simply as a novel of…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Dinner now, I’ll be back in a little while probably.  Hope you’re still on then.

When I was younger I used to skip the prologues along with the Author’s Notes and Introductions.  Now I read all three…as well as the dedication. 😛 But the prologue is most important to the story. 🙂

Oh, were there others who agreed with me about R…[Read more]

@rochellaine @seekjustice

Hi, it’s been SO long since I talked to you guys on this forum. 😀

Ooh the third draft of SFI? Yes, I do believe that the thing about the prologue was one point that I raised for my review.

@seekjustice Hello!!! 😀 😀

It’s almost time for dinner, but I’m working on law school for a bit.

How’s SFI going?  You’re still not going to put Rain and Kendall back together, are you? 😉 😛

*thinks of all my favorite parts and hopes you’ll keep them* 😉

@photobloggergal  YAAAAS ANOTHER WAYWARD KAPEEFER YEEEP

Anyway, welcome back!!! And congratulations! 😀 😀 😀