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@ellette-giselle

One more thing, does he carry a sword?

@mineralizedwritings

awesome! I can’t wait to see these!!!!!!

@keilah-h

(also…..LOL the bit about the phone dying, that’s a trope in EVERY story where you have a leader who has to communicate with your characters from a distance)

I know! 😀

there was literally a seen when Phil’s brother Andy was like, “Hang on Phil, before we don ANYTHING check your battery.”

@ellette-giselle

Yes that definitely answers my question! Thanks!

@ellette-giselle well I enjoyed the boxcar series for a while when I was younger, I think the thing was that I never really took them as particularly realistic anyway lol

The original series was written at a time when the market wasn’t oversaturated with “kids always know better” content, so it wasn’t as bad then, but yeah I can see problems in…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah, completely. I just can’t stand the hidden message of kids know best in just about every adventure movie or book. And Box car kids and Hardyboys literally got chucked across the room because I was SICK of the kids know everything.

There is a series, The Baker Family Adventures, that is a breath of fresh air!! It’s about a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint the chapter, what glitch?

@ellette-giselle yeah I get you on not liking the “Children disobey parents, keep secrets, do things the parents say no to, and in the end it all worked out because they were right and the parents were wrong, and there’s NO consequences for all of it” thing. Like, it’s not like parents aren’t wrong s…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle yeah it’s been a while since I watched the show, but I remember that scene/episode quite clearly. It was really well done.

@keilah-h

that was by FAR my favorite episode!! SOOOOOO good!!! like, gave me chills kind of good!!

@keilah-h

I’m glad you liked it! Yeah, it is sad. Poor Edwin. and poor Turin of course. Poor Sabina too!

And the “feeling like he’s a failure, stemming from pride” actually makes a weird amount of sense.

I know right?

@ellette-giselle @thearcaneaxiom ooh I remember that scene, that was a really good show.

also great moodboards!

And the “feeling like he’s a failure, stemming from pride” actually makes a weird amount of sense.

@ellette-giselle ooh wow! Super sad, but still a great job showing the harsh reality of death in war, especially on the losing side.

@linus-smallprint

Yup. Sure is, and the funny thing is, if you told him he was being prideful he’d look at you like you were crazy. He thinks that he’s a failure at the moment, and he’s not realizing that this stems from his pride.

@linus-smallprint

This is a realistic reaction from Aaron. He sees himself as a failure and has suddenly had more responsibility shoved on to him than he thought he would get. He does not feel ready and hides, lest he bring down others with him.

Yes! And, (spoiler kinda) he’s unintentionally beginning to see himself as Ardenta’s savior which is…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

but she will refuse to read anything I write until I improve my grammar.

Do I know what that’s like or what! lol.

I can’t say to much about this at the moment, but for now, know that this is nec for the story.

Ok…… I trust you.

Maybe.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper

k, here’s a new part.

@calyhuge @otherworldlyhistorian @thearcaneaxiom @linus-smallprint

Apologies for tagging y’all. Hope you don’t mind. I’ve started employing the advice y’all gave me, and I wanted to see what you fella’s think before I go any farther with it. Does Aaron still seem like a guy. I mean, would…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

This was great!!!

Suspicion: Alan’s father can control himself because he’s actually one of the Faithful. (Just a thought.)

Oh dear…… man…… I don’t know what to say. I mean, the grammar in there…… well some of it’s a little painful. lolol. I think I’m dso sensitive because I am bad at grammar so I’m always…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ah, good. I was just about to start breathing down your neck on this. haha.

@thearcaneaxiom

This is great! You gave me a good picture here! That scene with Simon on the water and Eden in the water were my absolute favorite!! OH MY GOODNESS! They were amazing! With all the help I have gotten here and on my WIP I must say that if Aaron does not turn out there perfect character it’s because can’t write. lol.

Thank you…[Read more]