hybridlore

Teleportation is no longer something Seb can do. I realized it isn’t true to his character, more so when he gets older. Umm since he could teleport earlier in this roleplay, we can say he was given a 24 hour teleportation ability to get to the school. 👍

@theshadow

so, besides that, how was the chapter?

@trailblazer

Also, here’s the part you were jumping ahead on Trailblazer. Great minds think alike in the writing world I guess. lol.

@loopylin

Marcel

The other boy shrugged. “I don’t care as long as I’m not there for the romance part.”

@theshadow Note: Flavia is under developed as we discussed, and I plan on adding more about her in chapter 7

 
Chapter 8
Julius leaned his shoulder against the side of the window. He stared out into the garden below, thinking of all the days he and Marcus had spent there. They had grown up together, and had been friends from the day they met. The…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Hey, quit jumping ahead here! lol. would it interest you to know that Julius and a Praetorian may or may not be having a little conversation right now?

Haha okay I’ll be quiet and let them have their discussion XD

@theshadow

Ack, I thought you would say that. I’ve been thinking also of a way to develop a bit more with her. I’m kinda distracted with the other stuff going on and thought I would drop it for now and come back. after all, this is my very rough draft. But yes, she is under developed.

@trailblazer

And lastly, this is just an idea that popped…

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@ellette-giselle

I agree with @theshadow, I would love to see more of how Marcus and Flavia’s relationship develops rather than just being told that it did. I also feel like I don’t know Flavia very well- I know you describe her when Marcus is thinking about her and talking to Caius, but I want to see it in her rather than just be told it about…[Read more]

@rae

I’ll be praying!!! Man, you are in serious trouble…. try some chocolate.

@theshadow

Yes, please send them on the WIP!!! I can’t wait!! I’m so glad you liked it!

Update
It’s now about 9:40, and I am beginning to regret this. I’m hitting some writer’s block and stuff. I already ended up breaking one of my own rules half by accident and half on purpose. I ate breakfast at 8:30 abouts, and took a break because my eyes were hurting from the computer screen (and the the hrs sleep started to kick in and I don’t…[Read more]

@theshadow

no edits or critiques for that one?

@theshadow

You have no idea how happy that makes me to know that someone is looking forward to reading more of the story!!!

Ok y’all, next chapter!!!

 
Chapter 7
 

Marcus walked with slow steps back toward the City of the Dead. He had known that something like this could happen, but he had hoped beyond hope that it wouldn’t. Part of him had even believed that Julius would listen, see the error of their old ways, and readily join him. The two of them could have done s…[Read more]

@theshadow

Well, now he’s happy. I mean VERY happy. You’ll see why……..

I’m posting the chapter right now.

@theshadow

yup. editing is going well, but I had to stop and go back to writing because Marcus was sad that he was being ignored. lol.

@rae

Ok, here’s my picture. I forgot I hadn’t posted it until I noticed it on my desktop. lol.

Hope I got close to what you were envisioning. I don’t have a scanner so it’s a photo. sorry about the bad quality.

@theshadow

Oh I’m so glad you like it!!!!! No it didn’t come off as rude, I just thought maybe there was a reason, like you had critiques you needed time to think through or something. I also pulled off a little because…. I don’t know, I guess I didn’t want anyone to feel like I was monopolizing their time. I have been told I have a gift for…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yes, should I not?

I went back and did a bunch of the edits y’all suggested and then I’m working on the next chapter. I want the book to be on the shorter side this time, but i’m trying to not rush things.

@rae

Wow! That’s even more daring then me! lol.

I’ve been writing since five and didn’t even think to take a look on here cause I didn’t think anyone was awake.

I’ll have to leave around noon, but I’ll be writing straight through, no brakes, until then.

@whalekeeper
Lois

The slightest bit of color grew in Lois’ pale cheeks. He adjusted his glasses, resisting the urge to look at Felicity again. He blinked a few times at Marcel.

“I, uh,” He cleared his throat.“I thought you hated playing cupid.”

Update
After learning that we had to leave for something between 15:00 and 15:30, I decided to begin writing at 2:00 so that I’d have a better chance of reaching my goal (cuz we may not return home until 19:00 to 20:00, I’m not sure.) It is currently around 5:30 and I have got over five thousand words added, and a good chunk of editing done in a…[Read more]