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@rae

I’m going to pop in and give my tidbit (because that’s so much more fun than homework).

1. Some scenes need to be short, some long, depending on what’s being delt with. This one may be short, but it’s a good length for the subject.

2. No? It just felt like a wrap up description of Mandin/a scene conclusion/transition to whatever was coming…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

My advice as a middle-grade writer and a YA reader:

1. Stick as much as possible to inner turmoil. Instead of focusing on how much the outward character is being damaged, focus on how the inner character is coping/struggling/whatever.

2. Instead of portraying each individual blow/whatever, gloss it all together into a simple…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Okay, I’m back to finish going through your scene.

What are your thoughts on Aaron/Joash? Do you feel bad for them at all, or do they just seem like villains?

I understand them and what they are doing. While they don’t seem like total villains to me (I see them in both a realistic and historical context), I hate what they are…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Hi! I didn’t read through all your questions yet since I don’t have much time right now. I’ll try to come back and answer them. =)

Is Riker’s sudden panic/possible panic attack realistic? If not, does anyone that has experienced a panic attack have any pointers? (I’ve only been on the brink of one once…it was not fun&#…

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@freed_and_redeemed

They were…twins. I forgot…

Oh.

How could you?

@freed_and_redeemed

Pastor Nikolai Aleksandr Smirnov and MGB Agent Peter Dimitri Kuznetsov together as the MCs of a novel would be fabulous…I’m getting ideas already…oh no XXD

What?! Another book? Oh dear. XD

A quick side note: did you intend Alesandr and Dimitri to be middle names or were you referring to patronymics (the father’s (or other…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

His own book? Welp, that is the way it goes, isn’t it. XD

@freed_and_redeemed

*GASPETH*

Soviet Russia era Bible smugglers/underground churches?! EEEEEEEE…I am so happy.

Also, I adore the name Nikolai.

SD Smith quotes…

“Call me Master, child.”

“Yes Masterchild.”

“I’d go for Joe’s arm. He’s sensitive there and has to get it wrapped by the pretty doctors every day.”

“Hey!” Joe said “They make me. It’s not like I want to.”

“Semi-madness?” Emma laughed. “So he’s ahead of you on the madness scale. That’s good.”

“I waked up this…[Read more]

I apologize…aren’t breaking hearts what all writers are best at??? 💕😭😆

What?!! Of course not!!!!!! *Smirk*

@freed_and_redeemed

Ooof. It’s so hard to pick a favorite character. XD Especially when I haven’t actually read the book book yet.

As you know, I do like Leon. He was my first favorite, when I first met them. He also reminds me of other characters I have long adored (Natan Israeli, Judah Ben-Hur). At times I don’t enjoy his arc very much,…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

*Heart melts*

That was so sweet! I love how you tied it all together, and Isabel is adorable.

Who is this Lina? She sounds so sweet and soo much more than a cripple.

Franz…you ignoramus. I’m about to use my store of archaic insults on you.

*Storms off in a huff*

@loopylin

*Pokes head out from secret vantage point*

Hey, I love long RPs. Please don’t apologize. I’d like to see more.

How else are y’all supposed to practice writing and me spying?

*Disappears into the shadows*

@elishavet-pidyon

The tea…XD That should soooo happen.

What if he puts a flower in her hair? What if one of the boys finds a snail or frog and wants to take it home?

@freed_and_redeemed

Awwww, I’ve been so wanting a sweet scene for poor Leon. He’s been through so much.

A walk would be sweet. What about Leon and his daughter picking flowers? The boys could find an earthworm to tantalize their sister with, which could transition into memories of teasing Aadelheide if you wanted (I don’t know if he did, it just…[Read more]

Are you struggling with the plotting itself? or missing scenes?

If you have a vague idea for a scene, you have the base for that scene. How would you describe the event? What emotions are the characters going through? Where is the setting? How did the characters get there? Who all is there? Which ideas could happen first? Are some of these ideas…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I don’t know exactly how to help, but I’ll try. Do you want scene ideas, or a workable method to create scenes, or something else?

Here’s a list of scenes I would kinda like to see someday. Discard if not helpful or unfitting.

• Aravember chasing a butterfly.
• Ara with a splinter getting helped by November (or some other swap…

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@princesachronicle22

It does seem to be acting strange, but I can’t tell why. What does it look like on your end?

@godlyfantasy12 Oh wow, that’s a pretty big thing to portray. And has gotten my brain on a rabbit trail with Moses and his siblings. Some people don’t realize that when they are critical of God’s minister they are undermining of God’s authority, just like Mirriam and Aaron over Moses’s non-Hebrew wife. As Mirriam learned, that’s not a good place…[Read more]