Hope Ann

@Daeus

‘Most comely he smiled’ is better

And little Teedletiden he fashioned for the trees
For all of these a city, Letharill, he made
Its glory was established that it should never fade[ I’m unsure about the meter in these last three lines, especially lines 1 and 3.]

Maybe instead: ‘And little Teedletiden he fashioned for trees

For all t…[Read more]

@hannah-c

Heh, I kind of need this as well. I started a new job overseas nearly two weeks ago now and though it’s been really overwhelming, I’ve also found myself longing to write in a better direction than where I was going before. (That probably sounds weird; I mean writing more for God’s glory and my own enjoyment than for the praise others…[Read more]

@warrioroftherealm *salutes* Awesome!

@christianna-hellwig @rochellaine @emma-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99

Thanks so much for your suggestions, everyone! Here’s what I have now.

“Oh, stars that remember the firstthings forgotten
How earth and its peoples were early begotten
They looked and beheld through a pane of dark glass
The earth in a swirling, untamable mass
From darkness f…[Read more]

@christianna-hellwig Thanks so much! I’ll take a look over this as soon as I get a chance.

Whoops @introvert_girl

@dekreel  Oh okay!  Hmmm…I’m not sure that sounds very feminine.

@introvert-girl  Persephone!!!!  YAS.  🙂

@emma-flournoy Ha! Well, we’ll see. I’d certainly love to.

@anne-of-lothlorien  Ha.  Those are literally the story of my life.  😂

@hannah-c  Boy, do I need this reminder sometimes.  🙂  To be honest, I’m at a weird stage in my writing career.  I’m struggling to find time to write *coughschoolcough*, but I want to write so bad.  All. The.  Time.  And that just doesn’t work when life is so busy.  *sighs*

I guess I need to start making time to write because I don’t want my…[Read more]

@Daeus Thanks.

Well, you’d better come up with an epic soundtrack for it then. 😉

@dekreel  Is your character a girl?

All I can think of are names like Peregrine (for a boy), Parrianne and Perris (those aren’t that good, I know).  😉

@emma-flournoy Sure, here’s one. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oV9qnLtpy4Cwn8-JFfJaXzOn4A5-yqRBR-AqlFIyYdk/edit?usp=sharing

Yeah, song creation and all that. I probably should have come up with something more original, but in my defense the song creation is the basis for the whole magical system, the last book’s allegorical aspects, and the…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 @rochellaine Thanks. 😀

@Daeus Oh hey, could I have it in a doc too? I was going to do it without one, but that sounds a much more efficient option.

I don’t write poetry, but I certainly appreciate good poetry, especially with good cadence.  That’s my favorite part.

I read through it, and it’s beautiful, and I do have some metrical suggestions.

Also, I feel compelled…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 Here ye be.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Gbxwg9Afksj6pdwgg7F-WuJKj9EtsG9V6lXSLyBVWBM/edit?usp=sharing

@that_writer_girl_99 More for metric pattern, but either one.