Haley Long

@xonos-darkgrate As far as the magic goes, I think it probably needs a bit more fleshing out with details, but as long as the power isn’t actually God’s power, but merely a separate power he created, I think you’re on the right track.

As for romance, it’s really up to you. It could be hard to write it without any experience and you do want to…[Read more]

@ethryndal *shivers* She looks fun to write. Her collage just makes me think “blood”. 😉
@dragon-snapper Well done! I love the picture of the trees.
@daughteroftheking Very cool! I’m guessing the ladybug has some significance?

@xonos-darkgrate Good ideas. The one thing that confuses me is point 1. It sounds strange that Satan could manipulate God’s power. Maybe there’s there’s an outside force of power that God created and controls as a testing ground? I’m sure you’ll figure it all out.

@Daughteroftheking it’s worth a shot. 😛

@Ethryndal sweeeeeet.

@xonos-darkgrate what @Daeus said, basically.

Otherwise I think it looks very solid. You seem to already have a lot of thematic material (foils and such) to work with, so you’re starting out with a wide perspective and plenty of stuff to juggle around. Also you seem to know what to do with that stuff, which is always a plus. XD

As for names……[Read more]

The story sounds solid from what you’re telling me. *thumbs up*

I do, however, wonder about the story world. It’s not that I think it’s wrong to do what you’re doing, but I wonder if it’s right. A force that leaks through cracks int he universe sounds mystical and there doesn’t appear to be a God in your story. I certainly believe that fantasy…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate I’m pretty sure most publishers will technically except writers of any age, though you may have to get a cosigner if you’re under 18 or something like that. I don’t know. I certainly know that some publishers do accept younger writers. Now, if they know that you’re younger, you will probably have a harder time convincing them to…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper Very nice. Love her name. 😉

@aislinn-mollisong Ohhh, I like it a lot!

@catwing Awww…glad he was okay!

@shannon @emily @salome01w4g @seekjustice @daughteroftheking
My sister Greta could use some prayer right now. She is very sick, possibly with strep throat and showing some symptoms of mono. Please pray that it is neither and that she will recover quickly. Thx!

@catwing Good job with the improvements. 😀

I also liked @perfectfifths‘ improvements. I’ll go off those and add some adjustments myself.

Alex is not normal. She and her friends talk with animals. (No need to say they understand animals. That’s assumed if they talk with them.)

Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who…

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@emily

How do you make it have that bar thing before something that you copy from another section?

Select the text and click the B-QUOTE button.

Had to share one more of my own. These are two characters from a novella idea I had a while back.

@Aislinn-Mollisong got it. 🙂 You did mention that you weren’t going to use that in the final, but I wanted to make sure. They’re fine to use for fun, but if you’re going to use them commercially in any way… yep. Copyrights. 😉

Awesome! Show it to me when you’re done.

@Aislinn-mollisong it looks great, but I’ve seen that image floating around and I’m pretty sure it’s not free; did you find the artist and ask for copyright license?

But as far as composition and layout, it looks great. The only thing is you might want to consider a slightly bolder, straighter font. Something more in tune with the fantasy mood.

@jane-maree Those are brilliant! Love, love, love. 😉

@emily and @shannon
I’ll pray! Have a great time!

@catwing First of all, go get a copy of How To Write A Sizzling Synopsis. It’s a very good book.

That said, here are a few tips to get you started. I’m working off your most recent synopsis.

1. Yes, use as few names as possible. Say “main character and his five friends” or something like that.
2. When you say these people are not normal–even…[Read more]