Haley Long

Oh, one more question. Do you prefer the ending lines:

“Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”

or

“Awestruck to see that in night the lights dance”

???

Thanks everyone! @emma-flournoy @ariella-newheart @rochellaine

I think I’ve got it now. I’ll come back to this a few months from now to see if I can make any small improvements, but I think it’s generally solid. 😀

@skredder  Hopefully her hair is how you imagined it…and I wasn’t sure about her eyes so I just did brown.  🙂

And closer…

@skredder  I may try her today or tomorrow…maybe.  🙂

@joy wow, a job overseas! Did you have to move or is it like an online thing?  What are you doing? Sorry, I’m a naturally curious person. 😳

I totally understand that. What genre do you write?

Yes, a week vacation might be just what you need for your writing. Take that vacation and headbutt it in the face Lol. 😂

HC

@warrioroftherealm *salutes* Awesome!

@christianna-hellwig @rochellaine @emma-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99

Thanks so much for your suggestions, everyone! Here’s what I have now.

“Oh, stars that remember the firstthings forgotten
How earth and its peoples were early begotten
They looked and beheld through a pane of dark glass
The earth in a swirling, untamable mass
From darkness f…[Read more]

@ingridrd that’s ok, sometimes you just need to rant.

Don’t worry, I feel you. I’m at the opposite end of the spectrum. I am out of school with time to write but instead I find myself running from it. Explain that.

And hey, if you ever need to rant I am totally here to rant to.

@christianna-hellwig Thanks so much! I’ll take a look over this as soon as I get a chance.

Whoops @introvert_girl

@dekreel  Oh okay!  Hmmm…I’m not sure that sounds very feminine.

@introvert-girl  Persephone!!!!  YAS.  🙂

@jenwriter17  Haha, thanks anyhow. Oh dear, asking me what my favorite book/movie is, is rather like asking me to tell you my life story. But I’d say “A Tale of Two Cities” by Charles Dickens and “Manalive” by G.K. Chesterton (Anything by Chesterton is my favorite really) would be at the top. Movies…um…probably the newest version of Les…[Read more]

@daeus  I hope you don’t mind. You didn’t tag me, nor did I ask first, but I love good meter in poetry so I messed around with your poem a bit. I put everything I changed in bold and bracketed the words I would remove. I didn’t get the meter perfect, as in there are somethings which were awkward but didn’t feel right changing as it could change…[Read more]

@emma-flournoy Ha! Well, we’ll see. I’d certainly love to.

@anne-of-lothlorien  Ha.  Those are literally the story of my life.  😂

@hannah-c  Boy, do I need this reminder sometimes.  🙂  To be honest, I’m at a weird stage in my writing career.  I’m struggling to find time to write *coughschoolcough*, but I want to write so bad.  All. The.  Time.  And that just doesn’t work when life is so busy.  *sighs*

I guess I need to start making time to write because I don’t want my…[Read more]

@dekreel  Is your character a girl?

All I can think of are names like Peregrine (for a boy), Parrianne and Perris (those aren’t that good, I know).  😉

@emma-flournoy Sure, here’s one. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oV9qnLtpy4Cwn8-JFfJaXzOn4A5-yqRBR-AqlFIyYdk/edit?usp=sharing

Yeah, song creation and all that. I probably should have come up with something more original, but in my defense the song creation is the basis for the whole magical system, the last book’s allegorical aspects, and the…[Read more]