Hannah Olsen

@mariposa  That’s fantastic!  *stares in awe*

@inkling-for-christ  First off, great job!  And congratulations on being brave enough to want feedback.  Now for my suggestions…*rubs hands together*

Okay, this may come as a shock to you, but my first thought was “delete the entire first chapter”.  It seems sort of unnecessary and a lot of it just dumps info instead of showing.  (Sorry, tryi…[Read more]

@salome01w4g  YESSS!!!!  Praise the Lord!

@salome01w4g Yay!!!!!

@dragon-snapper  Not too shabby, my friend.  😉  In other words, it’s really good.  I loooove the collage.  Nice work.  *high five*

@perfectfifths   The Fellowship of the Ring…I think Pippin says it.  😉

@salome01w4g  That’s rough…praying for you, friend!

@shannon and @dekreel

*eyes cookies and milk*  Shucks.  I can’t right now…though the refreshments look delicious.  Have fun!

@dragon-snapper Signing off. I wrote 527 words.

@dekreel I worked on chapter three of the first book in a fantasy trilogy I’m writing.

@dekreel Yes, I’m still here. 🙂

@dragon-snapper I’ll join you for the next hour.

Thanks @kate-flournoy and @dekreel! Good advice. 😀 Theme… that’s what I was missing. Thanks Kate! @Dekreel, those are some good things to consider! Thanks!

@kate-flournoy I can’t wait to see you (and @emma-flournoy and the rest of the family) tonight! 😀

@dragon-snapper I believe lesson three of the course addresses this subject. Have you looked at that yet?

@daughteroftheking  *shakes finger*  Not yet.  Don’t be naughty.

I like your new profile picture! 😉

@emma-flournoy  Thanks, girl! 😉

@daughteroftheking  Of course!  When it’s finished, of course.  I’m actually pretty close to done!  🙂 🙂 🙂

@shannon I remembered one more thing that’s helped me flesh out characters.

It’s the concept of yearning.

Yearning is different from a goal. A goal is generally viewed in an external light. For instance, the MC of my WIP has a goal of saving the world. His yearning, however, is to live a life that achieves greatness. This is much deeper and…[Read more]

@Dekreel ooh, that’s an unusually flattering representation of me waking up. It usually involves rolling over at least five times and eventually tumbling off the bed tangled in my fleecy blanket (with static hair flying all over the place) and then crawling my way still half asleep to my closet while splitting my ears with yawning and trying not…[Read more]

@Dragon-Snapper congratulations on branching out. 😉

They’ve covered a lot… the only thing new I have to add is pretty small. You mentioned that you’re tired of writing snarky characters and want to try something different, but had no idea how to go about it…

Why do you like snarky characters in the first place? Is it because they come easy…[Read more]

@Kina-Lamb well, that’s pretty sound as far as I can see. 🙂 The only step I might add between the two is figuring out the theme, but I’ve not done non-fiction before, so I can’t say for certain how majorly that would figure in.

In your place, I would just ask myself, What lesson does this story teach me? To have courage? To persevere? To be kind…[Read more]

@shannon Okay, I’m back.

First of all, I really like what everyone’s said so far.

I’ve never heard anyone else articulate the way I develop characters, but I think we all do it without noticing it. My big focus, at least for step one, is to hone in on the feel of a character.

You know how when a person comes to mind you get this certain…[Read more]