hanako

@freed_and_redeemed

I feel attacked😂

As you should.

Jk lol

@ellette-giselle

I know you’re probably busy…but would you like to help me and give me some tips on some of my writing as well?? We could be critique partners, if you’re up for that!

@trailblazer

Girl your suggestions were good, though! I haven’t done much research on starting off a book, so it sounds like you have more tools under your belt in that area than I do.

Thank you! That’s good, I guess…xD

@ellette-giselle

I still think you should keep the fountain scene! I loved that! Just maybe put it after the Colosseum? M…[Read more]

@rae

I actually do have a question. What does the last part of this mean? (I italicized the section in question)

On his left cheek is a singular reptilian scale, an upside down triangle with rounded corners and at an angle, in shape.

@ellette-giselle

Ah, sorry! I was just saying it was funny, not really saying to keep it or not, lol. If you were gonna change it, that’s cool too! I might not have caught something in the earlier messages. Maybe that makes sense? Lol, sorry, I didn’t mean to be confusing! 😓😅

@rae

For some reason I was imagining Tenz as blond.

Huh, it went back to normal after I posted.

@trailblazer
It’s weird on my end and I can’t leave this blank Chat Chat page.

@savannah_grace2009
OH NO I THINK IT’S WEIRD AGAIN.

(looks like I’m late to the party lol)

@ellette-giselle

I like the second version better, too, and the fountain/sword scene was funny! 😄

@rae

Two weeks sounds ok, I think I’m going to do this one. Tenz sounds fun.

@trailblazer

Lol! XD

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, sorry if I went a little overboard on the critiques lol

I know I’m not the best at giving advice…sorry

@trailblazer

Yeah that’s basically what happened xD

glad I’m not the only one!

@ellette-giselle

Yeah…I bet you two will get along just fine XDXDXD

@trailblazer

Ok I love what savannah_grace2009 just said about doing the whole colosseum scene first- that makes a lot of sense!

*sighs in relief* Okay because I was panicking after I posted and then you posted that you really liked the fountain scene…I felt sooo bad lol

Yeah, I overthink a lot xD

As far as the fountain scene, I think you could…

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@savannah_grace2009

Huh, that’s weird.

@highscribeofaetherium

It was really weird for like ten minutes, now it’s normal…😐

@elette-giselle
Okay…so I’m going to attempt to give my thoughts.
Just so you know…I haven’t been writing for THAT long…so take everything with a grain of salt…
I just feel bad giving feedback for some reason xD

First…your revisions did help a lot (I read both the first draft and second rewrite).
But the new opening scene felt a…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Looks normal to me.

Is it just me or did KP glitch out???? Like everything looks SUPER WEIRD