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@savannah_grace2009

Seems like a strong first chapter. I don’t have any feedback apart from that.

So this would be Sef and Lillitu’s book, correct? Imagining it, this structure should work really well! At the end of this one, you should have a epilogue with Neveah as a teaser for the next one.

Vethe is very unwilling to entertain the idea that there could be more planets 😂

(Hey, Vethe. If you’re in Celestiar, then WHAT PLANET ARE YOU ON? lol)

Vethe

Vethe glanced at Marcurious. “How can I trust you?” She asked the King, “You have given me no reason to believe that you would be telling the truth. Aside from the fact that you want us to murder these Lillenings.” She narrowed her eyes at the King. “Which honestly gives me even less reason to trust you.”

@rae

There’s twelve, not seven planets, but that can be easily edited so it’s not a problem.

@thearcaneaxiom

Do it lol

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @anyone-else

So here’s the first chapter of my revisions to the Andromeda book…ready for critiquing!

Chapter 1: New Beginnings

Newborn light sifted between the windows, piercing the darkness.

Through the smudged glass, Sef could see the Andromedan sunrise, she could see the indigo trees dancing as the wind pushed them…[Read more]

@power

I like it! very intriguing!

@jonas

Okay, sounds good!

@savannah_grace2009 @rae

I know. I’ll try to write something tomorrow.

@rae

Awww thanks!

Yeah ik, idk how to start it tho lok

@savannah_grace2009 @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @anyone-reading-this

This RP needs to get active again.

@savannah_grace2009 @highscribeofaetherium

Koshtin

In reply to the man’s plead, King Koshtin looked at the white haired woman who had challenged his integrity.

“He is from a world they call Andromeda, I myself have seen it through my magic. I myself chose him from that world. There are not only seven planets, for this is a planet not of the…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Thanks for the name! I never can remember names.

@savannah_grace2009

I love Xandro!

Lol, I can totally see some of the horses where I work doing that!

@jonas

Really? Oof.

Did you hear about the guy who did Smaug? I forgot his name, but to do that voice, his vocal cords would literally bleed and he still did it! At that point I don’t think it was wise to keep playing the part but still…Smaug wouldn’t be Smaug without that voice.

Speaking of the Gollum voice, did anyone know Andy Serkis had to drink a special drink to avoid ruining his voice or something? They called it ‘Gollum juice.’