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@loopylin

The plan right now is basically: get everyone to the ship. So, I wouldn’t think it would be a problem. Worst case scenario, you would be responsible for getting your characters there without an NPC to help.

@rae @esther-c

I really miss this RP…is it still going??? And is there any way that I can bring Sef and Liv back…? 👀👀👀

@trailblazer

That is so cool!!!! That sounds amazing!!!!!

@loopylin

Thank you so much <333

Yesssss! I ate too much food lol

@jonas

Oh okay!

That’s not the reason anymore I guess 😂 I actually forgot I said that…a lot has changed lol

That makes sense though, I understand what you’re saying!

@savannah_grace2009

Before you said that the master wanted to make Jaden his second in command to sweeten the deal. I’m saying that if that’s still the reason, I feel like you should portray Kaden as more hesitant initially, because as it is, it doesn’t really feel like he needed that incentive.

Oh, and as for why I changed the ending instead of them abandoning Lilitu…

There are a couple reasons why I did that. Maybe they’re not good reasons lol but I’m going to leave it, at least for now so I can play with it. I think it will make the story make a little bit more sense  in the future so I’m just going to leave it for now.

@hybridlore

Thank youuu!

@highscribe

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

Thank you so much!

I corrected the things you suggested and you’re right, I think it will flow a lot better! Thank you so much, you have been very helpful! <3

@jonas

I think I asked before why he insisted on this, and you said that it was to sweeten the deal for Kaden. Personally, I feel like you should show Kaden as having more hesitation if this is going to work. To me, it seems like they have already made up their minds to become Pythonos. Sure, they’re scared, but to me, it still doesn’t convey a s…

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@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Oh my goodness you guys are so good!!!!

I actually have noticed a couple of the things you’ve said before but for some reason I forgot to change them… *facepalm* I’ll go fix them now before I forget again lol!

@savannah_grace2009

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

The sensation made her want to scream, cry out in agony…

You don’t really need an ellipsis here. A period would work better.

“It’s those cursed Paynes,” Odessa muttered, anger flashing in her violet eyes.

This makes it sound like Kaden and Sevryn have tried to get…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Well, I do have that handy google doc, so it isn’t terribly hard, especially considering that there are only three groups.

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @raxforge @hybridlore @rae @grcr @loopylin

Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)

The newcomer stared in astonishment as the armored creatures sagged and went still. “That was…incredible…” he stammered, still in shock. “No wonder–”

Just then, there was a prolonged wailing blast of a horn. The man stiffened. “We have…[Read more]

Oh, and @rae, do you need help deciding on a place to introduce your new character?

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @raxforge @hybridlore @rae @grcr @loopylin @the_lost-journal @beth-torres @highscribeofaetherium (I think I got everyone)

Alright! Sorry for the wait, but I’m here to get us moving again.

To quickly recap, I believe that this is where things currently stand:

One group, consisting of Marcel, Leon and Julian, Ben and…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Yep, I’m still here lol! Good to hear from you.

only two lone figures in the street.

You don’t need “only” and “lone”. I would probably keep “lone”. That one sounds better to me.

Yet every step was marked with purpose, with determination, and—all the more terrifying—desperation.

I’m gonna be a real stickler here, but I don…[Read more]

and 238…

and 239

Go to page 240 of the Character Party RP…and scroll to the bottom….ahhhhhh I can’t believe I did that *cries*

@trailblazer

Oh that sounds so hard :/

Thank you so much!!! <3

How have you been???