@hanako
Active 10 months, 3 weeks ago- Rank: Loyal Sidekick
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HighScribe replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.
The sensation made her want to scream, cry out in agony…
You don’t really need an ellipsis here. A period would work better.
“It’s those cursed Paynes,” Odessa muttered, anger flashing in her violet eyes.
This makes it sound like Kaden and Sevryn have tried to get…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Well, I do have that handy google doc, so it isn’t terribly hard, especially considering that there are only three groups.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @raxforge @hybridlore @rae @grcr @loopylin
Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)
The newcomer stared in astonishment as the armored creatures sagged and went still. “That was…incredible…” he stammered, still in shock. “No wonder–”
Just then, there was a prolonged wailing blast of a horn. The man stiffened. “We have…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Oh, and @rae, do you need help deciding on a place to introduce your new character?
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @raxforge @hybridlore @rae @grcr @loopylin @the_lost-journal @beth-torres @highscribeofaetherium (I think I got everyone)
Alright! Sorry for the wait, but I’m here to get us moving again.
To quickly recap, I believe that this is where things currently stand:
One group, consisting of Marcel, Leon and Julian, Ben and…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Yep, I’m still here lol! Good to hear from you.
only two lone figures in the street.
You don’t need “only” and “lone”. I would probably keep “lone”. That one sounds better to me.
Yet every step was marked with purpose, with determination, and—all the more terrifying—desperation.
I’m gonna be a real stickler here, but I don…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
and 238…
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
and 239
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Go to page 240 of the Character Party RP…and scroll to the bottom….ahhhhhh I can’t believe I did that *cries*
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Sara replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Sara replied to the topic Gauging Interest in a Special New RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
For all the new ppl looking into Character Party, you should find the part where the castle was burning down, the queen was almost killed, the villains were running rampant, the charries were squabbling and Prince Fennin was trying to hold everything together…cuz I think that was our most chaotic masterpiece. Or you could try and find the e…
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-GRCR- replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Sara replied to the topic Gauging Interest in a Special New RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Some of my fondest memories of KP are from the Character Party RP. (If you’re newer and don’t know what that is, I will link it below.) It had a good run, but eventually, it fizzled out and died
I WAS JUST THINKING ABOUT THAT
Like we had a BLAST
Oh my goodnesss
Do we still have that google doc where we copied and pasted it all???
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Sara replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Old Character Party people will understand how horrible that is
NO NOT THE DRAGON PICS AHHHHHHH
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Sara replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
HI JANESSA I’VE MISSED YOUUUU
If you look at the post above where I explained to Loopy, that kinda describes where I’m at right now lol
Though it’s not all bad!!!! My mom having cancer hasn’t totally ruined my life because I’ve grown closer to Jesus and really kind of found peace in it although I definitely have good and bad days!
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Sara replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Well, my mom was recently diagnosed with mantle cell lymphoma, a rare and aggressive type of lymph node cancer (I’m not sure if you heard or not…I lose track of who I’ve told and who I haven’t, so I’m sorry if I’m repeating myself to you hahaha!). It’s been pretty rough and Thanksgiving just felt different this year knowing there’s…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Omc really?!?! That makes me so happy <3 thank you for reading it, it means a lot to me!
I agree, the beginning HAS to be perfect!!! hahahah I’m such a perfectionist!
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Sara replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Awww thank you so much!!!!! that’s so sweet of you and it means a lot!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Anyone want to critique this??? I edited the prologue…AGAIN…bwahahaha
I feel too guilty to tag people (idk why…that’s just me) but I’m still going to tag some people…lol
@rae @jonas (not sure if you are still on here a lot but I’m ALIVE in case you were wonderingg!) @highscribeofaetherium @thearcaneaxiom (not sure if you’re still here…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic Hi…. (: in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Yesss I know I deserve it…lol
Yeah I know the feeling, I’ve had personal stuff going on tooo lol
I’ll be praying for you!
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