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@ellette-giselle

why Nico left, where is the baby from the prologue, who are the two different groups here. I know you have hinted at it a little in the prologue, but I’d still like more back story and more info. I tend to be a little more like Tolkine in writing, as in, I have a backstory for everyone, and most of the time, %60 percent of the b…

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@rae

Uh…stars, that’s weirdly stated. Sorry, it basically means the triangle scale is at an angle.

Ah, ok.

@keilah-h

do you have a picture of Tenz? A drawing, faceclaim picture, anything?

You DO NOT want to see me previous drawing attempts. They were just creepy. I don’t really have anything else though…I’ll try drawing a picture that’s actually good for once.

Sorry, guys, our internet was out for a while cuz of a storm.

@highscribeofaetherium

Uh…stars, that’s weirdly stated. Sorry, it basically means the triangle scale is at an angle.

@ellette-giselle

Yeah. He may or may not have a slightly longer torso than average. Since I haven’t made that official yet, I omitted it from description.

@loopylin

I love that

@ellette-giselle

Oh, awesome! I would love to have a character drawn 🙂 It might take me a bit to decide which one, though.

@ellette-giselle

I do have one question.

What is the plot of your story (feel free to share spoilers, I don’t mind)?

How long is your novel going to be?

I have one more chapter after this one that is ready for critiques, and then I have to continue working on revisions until it’s ready for more detailed critiques.

@ellette-giselle

Yes, I do!  (I have about 36K words) However, I’m in the middle of a big  revision, so the chapters won’t really make sense. Though I do have the next chapter that I *think* should be done.

Chapter 1

Strong hands grabbed her shoulders, trying to rip her away.

But Sef wouldn’t let go.

Eyes scrunched shut, tears leaking fro…[Read more]

What outer plot is your protagonist/s dealing with?

*casually looks up what an outer plot is* I really need to learn more writing terms!! 😬😬😬

If you were plopped into your project’s universe, would the characters love you or hate you? Why?

I honestly don’t know! They probably wouldn’t even notice me…I tend to think of myself as annoying X…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, maybe take Puddleglum *clears throat* I mean, that other writing coach, with a grain of salt. Scratch that, maybe a pillar of salt. lol.

🤣

 However, I will say that there is something to be learned from everyone. So, try to see the gold in the sand on what he’s saying. It might be something about dialogue, or description, or…

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@jonas

I have mostly positive things to say actually lol! The way I phrased that did sound a bit scary, sorry!

You’re good…I also tend to overthink a lot and assume the worst in situations 😂

I’m excited to hear your thoughts!

@ellette-giselle

I don’t have time right now to look through all your new stuff, but I will get to it eventually!

@savannah_grace2009

OH NO WHAT ELSE IS WRONG WITH IT 😬

now I’m scared xD

jk jk I’m sure whatever you have to say will be very helpful, as always! 🤣🤣

I have mostly positive things to say actually lol! The way I phrased that did sound a bit scary, sorry! 😅

@ellette-giselle

Oh I love what you did in the example. Perfect. I get so caught up in making sure the info that is needed is there, that I think I lost a little depth with the story. Whoops. I haven’t ever done Historical fiction before, so I’m a little stressed about keeping things accurate to history. I am surrounded by books on Rome , rom…

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@highscribeofaetherium @ellette-giselle

Yeah…oops!

I fixed that in the platform I write on (it’s called Reedsy), thank you for catching that!

@ellette

The reason that I accidently changed that to Selena is because I changed that section a LOT. I just came up with the idea to have their names be changed recently, because when you turn to…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Found it!

I’ll give you some feedback in a few days. We have a big party going on at our house tomorrow (and I’m working this afternoon) so I’m pretty busy, and I want to give this a good amount of time—there’s a lot of changes from the original version that I would like to comment on.

But for now, I’ll just say, this is really good!

@elette-giselle

(Few days late, but anyway…)

Hello! Welcome to KP!

I’m Jonas, a recently graduated homeschooled Christian writer. I write fantasy, specifically what I would call “hard fantasy.” I have only completed one story (not including short stories), which is an 8 chapter novella, but I have plans for many others, all if which take pl…[Read more]