Greta

@aislinn-mollisong  Well, here’s Amber.  😉

Oh whoops I didn’t see that @dekreel was already going to…*shrugs*  Can I draw her anyway?

@aislinn-mollisong  *facedesk*

@aislinn-millisong  I will do her!

@sage-g  *gasps*  You are really talented.  She looks great!!!!! 🙂  And thank you.

@dekreel This topic is two years old, back when Sarah was still with us.

@aislinn-mollisong

Honestly, from what I’ve seen, it seems better to not directly describe the moves a character is doing in a fight scene, and instead focus on the emotion and feel of it. Allow me to demonstrate:

Original – “John executed a perfect overhand cut, which Xavier quickly blocked with a hanging point.”

And yes, I did just pull two…[Read more]

@supermonkey42 Can’t remember exactly. It was either lack of involvement or I didn’t have enough time.

Oops @ashlyvye

<p style=”text-align: left;”>@ashleyvye realistic fantasy so like a fantasy world but without anything that can’t be explained aka magic? Hey, we are all newbies at something. Somebody always knows something we don’t. I’ve been at this four years and often still feel like a newbie. How has your writing experience been thus far?</p>
I tried writing…[Read more]

@joy that must be pretty tough having a new job and being away from home. In guessing that would make you closer to my age (20)? What country are you in now, if you don’t mind me asking.

Cool. Ooh romance. I used to absorb Christian romances but after years of that I got tired of the copy and paste characters and plot lines. But now, I have this…[Read more]

Oh, one more question. Do you prefer the ending lines:

“Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”

or

“Awestruck to see that in night the lights dance”

???

Thanks everyone! @emma-flournoy @ariella-newheart @rochellaine

I think I’ve got it now. I’ll come back to this a few months from now to see if I can make any small improvements, but I think it’s generally solid. 😀

@skredder  Hopefully her hair is how you imagined it…and I wasn’t sure about her eyes so I just did brown.  🙂

And closer…

@skredder  I may try her today or tomorrow…maybe.  🙂

@daeus Thankee. *bows* Well, I tried incorporating small ‘good’ things and it’s been a lot let dismal lately. I think I just let Ike gnaw on dismal’ness’ for too long. XD

@sarah-anson I really like the italicized bit you said there. *nods* I agree. Thanks!

@joy wow, a job overseas! Did you have to move or is it like an online thing?  What are you doing? Sorry, I’m a naturally curious person. 😳

I totally understand that. What genre do you write?

Yes, a week vacation might be just what you need for your writing. Take that vacation and headbutt it in the face Lol. 😂

HC

@warrioroftherealm *salutes* Awesome!

@christianna-hellwig @rochellaine @emma-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99

Thanks so much for your suggestions, everyone! Here’s what I have now.

“Oh, stars that remember the firstthings forgotten
How earth and its peoples were early begotten
They looked and beheld through a pane of dark glass
The earth in a swirling, untamable mass
From darkness f…[Read more]