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@f5a8c3e92 That’s a good idea, but where’s the conflict in that? What’s the point of a prison where everyone can leave whenever they want–when the Elementals who do leave will be killed instantly? That truly is the world they live in.

@feedingmygoldfish I’m definitely not the best with hugs but will allow it for a few people. A complete INTJ here. What type are you?

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *grins* Well, you’re stuck with us now. 😀 We solemnly pledge to help you with all your problems… whether you want that or not.
*goes off cackling*
*pops her head back in momentarily* 12+ years… wowsers. I’ve been seriously writing for four years and that seemed like forever… guess not.
Kudos for sticking to it so long…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 She has books? Sounds like a pretty good prison to me. 🙂
This is just a theory, but what if they really can just leave whenever they want? What if they don’t get shocked when they leave, but that was just a device to strike fear into them? Maybe, to begin with, there were a few instances, but after that, everything was just…[Read more]

Uh, yes. I’m still struggling to digest everything that’s been said on here…

It’s incredible. Honestly. You guys have no idea how much this means to me. After 12+ years of writing by myself, I actually have someone else giving me ideas and telling me what I could do differently… @kate-flournoy

@That_Writer_Girl_99 ooooohhhhhh boyyyyyy… *grins monstrously**chuckles evilly* You have no idea what you just set in motion. I just took a whole long beautiful course that this wonderful place of Kingdom Pen put together on mastering theme and you ask me for help—!!! YESSSSSS!! Bliss!!! *closes eyes**sighs happily*

Tell you what. Give me…[Read more]

I’m…planning, or…er…thinking. *sits down, head spinning* I’ve got so much to think about. I’ve been in two different places all day–entertaining family in the real world, and exploring my story-world in my head…

I’m sure my family is ready to kill me. “Elizabeth, will you please stop staring into space and talk to your cousin?”

@dragon-snapper

@kate-flournoy The concept of themes is actually quite new to me, so any advice you have for me is welcome.

That’s an awesome description of Kara. If I could draw, I probably would have tried to sketch out her features, but I can’t…unfortunately.

The more I think about it, the more I feel like the theme you liked the best, intelligence vs.…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper Oddly enough, I didn’t realize that any of the issues you listed above could be considered incorrect–thanks for pointing those out!

But as for my critical side. If you feel as if I am melting your work, please tell me. I don’t want to be too mean.

Oh, please. One of the reasons I joined KP was so I could eventually get c…[Read more]

@f5a8c3e92 yes, much better. They pretty much already caught everything that needed help, I think.
Weaving the dream thing in was a great idea. Made it a lot more intriguing and set up the premise quite nicely. 😉

@f5a8c3e92 But that’s just it–the Elementals know they’re freaks, but the are scared of their powers. They’re being forced to think that the prison is the best thing for them–that they would be worse off outside as opposed to the safety of the prison walls.

I know you can’t see it in this little snippet, but Kara doesn’t want to leave. Before…[Read more]

@jenali @daeus @that_writer_girl_99 @northerner @anyone-else I’m probably going to be writing.

@that_writer_girl_99 And even after all that, I forgot to tag you. 😛

I’m not sure what others said, but this is my review.
I really love this! The whole thing, especially the plot. The idea is great, and I cannot wait to see what happens next. But as for my critical side. If you feel as if I am melting your work, please tell me. I don’t want to be too mean. 😀

This is the life I wish I had. This is the normal…

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@That_Writer_Girl_99 um… Kara? *scrunches her eyes up* Shortish light brown hair… plain face that could be pretty if she smiled… (like most faces. 😀 ) fairly big eyes that are probably somewhere between blue and grey… almost blunt nose… probably fairly large-boned when it comes to build, but not particularly big. She looks bookish to…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 It’s the whole ‘we’re freaks because we’re different and want freedom and need to rebel against society’ thing.

I’ve had several people tell me the story sounds cliche, but I’m not sure how… @f5a8c3e92

@that_writer_girl_99 *opens mouth to speak* *shuts it again* Only just read this and it looks like everyone else has said everything I was going to say! I will find something… It’s interesting that you’re writing a story in present tense. I’ve read books that have a narrator that occasionally talks about what’s happening while they ‘write’ or…[Read more]

@feedingmygoldfish *tries to breathe as lungs are squeezed to breaking point* *awkwardly doesn’t know what to do with arms*

@kate-flournoy @daeus @jane-maree @winter-rose @that_writer_girl_99 Anyone else???