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@alia ….. Ah, well, if you’re sharing fingernails, then we’re good. 😛

Oh, hi @cloudy! Thanks for the feedback!

The lack of contractions are something that I’m using to build Kara’s character. She is kinda refined, but that’s because…well, she has her reasons. It’s on purpose, I promise, but I’ll watch out for what you said.

About the length…I haven’t thought about the word count, or which kind of book this…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99, I like what you have so far. Honestly, to me, it sounds like a (long) short story or a novella/novelette. I can see what people are saying about cliches and things, and you have to be careful, but from what I’ve read, so far it seems pretty original. 🙂 I would add, you and @Jess have a habit of saying do not instead od…[Read more]

Okay. Now I know for next time.

How’s things, Kate? All I do is ask you questions about my story. How are things goin with your WIPs and your life? 🙂 @kate-flournoy

Yes. That makes total sense. 😛

@That_Writer_Girl_99

Oh, man. Okay.

Yeah! I mean, I’m excited about it. I feel like maybe I should have waited to pick a theme until I knew the characters better. That make sense? @kate-flournoy

@That_Writer_Girl_99 well, themes can certainly shift. It’s happened to me before. 😛 If you keep having that feeling, don’t be afraid to play around with it and figure out what’s off and whether you can fix it or just want to go with something else.

That’s great!

And no, it’s not. I’m sure this series is going to be awesome too, but what I…[Read more]

Hm. Yes. Okay. *writes this down*

I’m concerned about my theme. When I started the story, Intelligence vs. Ignorance sounded like a good idea, but now that I’ve planned out the characters a bit more, and now that I know them better… I’m not sure the theme would work. These characters–especially Matthias and Kara–are going to struggle with a…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 nope, looks great! I love the different facets of Matthias’ personality. 😀

As for Blake… I really think you want him inside the prison. That brings the battle directly to Kara where she is right now and sets the whole place in an uproar as conflicting beliefs and agendas collide all over about what to do with him. This…[Read more]

@daeus, thank you ever so much! Your critique will be carefully considered. 🙂

@Ethryndal Why thank you. I try my best to be thorough. 😛

@delightinlife Now I have the unpleasant task of trying to beta read after @jane-maree‘s wretched thoroughness. *groans* Jane, remind me to have you beta read my novel when it’s done. 😉 Bella, I’m going to do a little tonight, but I’ll probably finish tomorrow.

PS. I’m the Sarah Baran in the comments. Just so you don’t get freaked out by the…[Read more]

@delightinlife
I read your story and so far, to me it looks good. I don’t have a suggestion for a title because honestly, I didn’t quite know what was going on. You dropped me into another world with fighting and everything…That happened way too quickly. I know this is beta and you’re just starting out, but I’d say, write a little more of the…[Read more]

@delight in life
I read your story and so far, to me it looks good. I don’t have a suggestion for a title because honestly, I didn’t quite know what was going on. You dropped me into another world with fighting and everything…That happened way too quickly. I know this is beta and you’re just starting out, but I’d say, write a little more of the…[Read more]

@Daeus cool! Great job. *offers pizza*

@DelightInLife okay I’ve gone over it. 😀

@GracieGirl cool! Good luck with that. 😛

@Daeus I’m editing and critiquing.