Grace H.

@seekjustice @rochellaine

I guess I can accept that but I would really like for the reason why these people are following this fellow who is clearly less wise than them to be explained in the story. Maybe when Jonas and Chessy are talking after he asks her whether she likes Justice, Jonas can mention that.

Speaking of characters that are bad at…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Instead of saving rich people, Justice could save those that were wrongly condemned.

Oh and I see you asked me to answer the questions that you have put at the end of WIIE. Do you want me to answer here or in the doc?

@seekjustice

Oh right another thing I forgot to mention. There was this part where Chessy was saying that Justice could get others to respect but not love him. That was true but something about it also confused me. There were other revolutionaries like Quillon and Jonas that seem mature so I was struggling to understand why they would go along…[Read more]

@seekjustice

I like him as a character. I think what you’ve done with him is interesting. As a person though… I find him really cold and stiff in SFI. I don’t know what Chessy sees in him. I think it runs in the family. Chessy, Sapphire, Jean… they all seem to have really bad taste and judgment when it comes to relationships. I don’t think h…[Read more]

@seekjustice @rochellaine @alia

Hey guys. I’m here now.

Ooh a discussion on SFI which I can actually participate in now…

@seekjustice

Oh. I must have been dozing off when I read that part 😂

But my suggestions for Mathias are the same. Figure out what his motivations are, maybe think about how his relationship with his superior officer Caderousse and his fellow soldiers are etc. So far to me Mathias feels rather unnecessary. He seems to be there just to show that…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Hey. Great to know that they are going to be fixed! I’m really looking forward to reading your second draft now! 😊

For Mathias, I guess you can start by thinking up of a believable motivation for him much like Caderousse. Why is he serving in an immoral legal system? Why did he let Chessy and Rain go instead of reporting them to C…[Read more]

@rochellaine

OK it’s good that that’s going to be fixed in the next draft. 😀

I read your fanfics! They are really sweet and cute! 😊

@rochellaine

As I have said, I am fine with the sparing of Mathias. The contrived resolution I am speaking of is the resolution to the Caderousse-Chessy conflict which is resolved with Caderousse, much like Javert, letting Chessy go and committing suicide later. In the original Les Mis, this was a fitting and sufficient resolution because of…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Thanks! I’ll read them later. 😀

Oh no, not really. I’ll go check the comments out later if I have the time.

I was not expecting a full blown Valjean-Javert conflict. But Chessy (along with her father) is sort of like Valjean with the unjust hard labour and all that. To me, SeekJustice is writing this from a ‘Valjean’ perspective…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Hey. Just dropping by to let you know that I’ve finished reading both SFI and WIIE. 🙂 I didn’t put in any comments because I know you’re already in the process of editing. I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for so I’ll just share with you my general thoughts.

Overall I quite like both of them. Retellings are usually…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Yep. Still here. Still not-working-on-my-WIP.

@seekjustice

I wasn’t intending to wake up so early! My sleep was not going very well so I figured I might as well come back on here.

Ah well. If physics ever taught man anything, it is that greater force is required to start a motion than continue it.

@rochellaine @seekjustice

Hey guys. I’m awake earlier than usual so I’m here now.

Um I think I’m going to be not-writing and reading When Infinity is Empty today… 😅

@seekjustice

Hey. I just finished reading Part 1 of When Infinity is Empty and there’s… no more left? 😢

@rochellaine

It’s 9:12 PM. Bye!

@rochellaine

Haha thanks. But since I knew it was a Les Mis retelling I was pretty much expecting it. I suppose that dulled the impact for me.

That and the fact that I was either squealing or giggling whenever I spotted a Les Mis reference. Which, um, isn’t really the intended reaction for certain scenes…? 😳

*bows* 😓 Sorry @seekjustice

I do…[Read more]

@rochellaine

@seekjustice goes to bed early right so I think she might be asleep now 😛

I’m still here though. Just finished reading Stars Fill Infinity.

@seekjustice

From the way my own story is going, I think mine will be very long too.

Oh, I am reading Part 1 of your Stars Fill Infinity now. 😉

Goodnight @rochellaine 😛

@seekjustice

Haha it’s just really intimidating to see how long the thread is and how many pages there are in the Google doc…

But considering that I just dumped a total of six chapters in this forum for beta review, I have no right to complain, do I? 😛