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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 4 months ago
War-zone makes it sound like a WWII story.
@Daeus Myself is most sorry. *cringe* I didn’t remember who said to change it, but maybe that doesn’t work grammatically (why doesn’t ‘plummets into tangled plots work’ though?) …so do what yourself’s brain suggests. Critics aren’t for making you do what they want, after all, but for suggesting. 😛
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Book Cover Opinions in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus I wasn’t thinking the font should be changed, just really toned down in color; I had meant for the design under the title when I said something more angular.
I suppose it could work the same way to change the font to something more angular…in fact that might be better ’cause I like sub-title design.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus That’s great. 🙂 Only thing I’d say more is maybe have a stronger verb than encounter for the ‘he encounters tangled plots…’ stuff. I see why you changed it, ’cause one can hardly plummet into bandits; but just ‘encounters’ is a little unexciting.
And actually, reading the other one again, I like it better as ‘plummets’, without the…[Read more]
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus That’s great. 🙂 Only thing I’d say more is maybe have a stronger verb than encounter for the ‘he encounters tangled plots…’ stuff. I see why you changed it, ’cause one can hardly plummet into bandits; but just ‘encounters’ is a little unexciting.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Book Cover Opinions in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus That is cool. Those buildings! I love them.
I think your name would look better the same sort of color as the title, but darker; and also what Hope said—the fonts do look a little mismatched.
Though actually…I think it’ll be great once you change the name color, without changing the font.
And the stuff about the rain too.The title…[Read more]
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Jess that’s kind of neat.
@Ethryndal Will do. 🙂
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Jess praying lots!
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 4 months ago
Yay, it worked.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus These three sentences
Matthew returns years later with wealth and power, ready to fulfill his vengeance. Assuming the mysterious guise of Edwin Brook he begins his struggle for justice. Uncanny events, however, keep thwarting his every move.
sound choppy to me.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Rogue One in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
Yes people, seriously. It so needs you to watch it. WAY exceeded my expectations.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Illustrations and Personal Opinions Regarding Them in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus Oh gracious, that was dumb. *headdesk*
@I-J-Anderson There!
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Illustrations and Personal Opinions Regarding Them in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
I’m sorry…dunno what’s goin’ on. 😛
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Illustrations and Personal Opinions Regarding Them in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
i-j-anderson
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Illustrations and Personal Opinions Regarding Them in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
That’s the right tag but it didn’t work…lemme try again.
I-J-Anderson
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Illustrations and Personal Opinions Regarding Them in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
I-J-Anderson Well if the book was written well, there won’t be a long, clunky, awkward description. 😛
I prefer to get my picture of the character from reading the book, not by an actual picture. It just seems more real to me that way. I could like looking at pictures of characters after I already have my own head picture, but not to get my perception.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Ethryndal Definitely. I sure hope she’s able to do it.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Merry Christmas! in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
You too @Dragon-Snapper. 😀
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
Whew @Jess. 🙂
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Jess It’s okay, I’ll respond since I’m already here. 🙂
I’ll be praying, and I hope everything goes well.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Hi guys! in the forum Start HERE 9 years, 4 months ago
@Emma-L Ooh yes, cello and oboe are awesome too. (Provided they’re playing nice music, of course. 😛 A good kind for those are slow and dramatic and also sad pieces.)
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