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@leumeister  I guess CG would be my favorite…hmm, I like the Despicable Me movies, Tangled, and Toy Story.  I’ve never written a story with having it animated in mind…neat idea though.

@leumeister  I definitely enjoy watching animation…the rest of it doesn’t interest me much.  That’s super cool that you like it!  (Nice alliteration in the title, by the way.) 🙂

@sleepwalkingmk  *wipes away happy Christmas tears*   This is adorable and heartwarming.  I literally had one suggestion.  (Btw, I am “Anonymous” on the document.)  Brilliant work!  🙂

@mariposa  It’s just perfect.  This definitely calls for a party.  Chocolate, anyone?

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@mariposa  Well, sci-fi doesn’t have anything to do with KP, soooooooooo…

@mariposa  AAAH! Don’t steal my thunder!!!!

It’s still awesome! 😉

@sleepwalkingmk I like it. I actually enjoy the stillness of it. 👍

@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

@xonos-darkgrate I’ll be praying for you 😉

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Yes, as a matter of fact, I do.

Ent Juice.

Merry and Pippin did really well on that stuff in Lord of the Rings

@amy-l-klob

I wouldn’t start off with the action right away, although you do need to start off with something interesting, and that’s because of two things. Firstly) The hardship of the protagonist being separated from her normal life and what’s dear to her (which is great, by the way) isn’t, as you said, going to be as impactful unless the…[Read more]

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀

@epicaddie2 Continuing to pray! <3

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

@leumeister My pick would be Iridian, Raphael, and Lachlan

@xonos-darkgrate And my opinion on your excerpt is… no, I don’t think it’s too dark. Although opinions may differ

@xonos-darkgrate I agree with @kate-flournoy

I really dislike things that are blandly clean, and I stories that tackle dark questions and themes, but I don’t think as Christians, we should rely on swear words to drive a story forward. They can easily be implied, and we don’t need to write them directly into the story. That said, I don’t mind made…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate  *shudders*  I don’t think it was too dark.  And it’s very well-written!