@faithdk
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Daeus replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 7 years, 11 months ago
Alright. Hopefully we’re good now. Can you find any way to improve it? Does it attract you? (why or why not?)
@leumeister @emma-flournoy @hope @kate-flournoy @perfectfifths @faithdk @jess @his-instrument @writefury @gretald @ingridrd @sarah-h @the-bean @mark-kamibaya @warrioroftherealm @hannah-c @ivy-rose @ethryndal @dragon-snapper @anne-swiftbla…[Read more]
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Daeus started the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 7 years, 11 months ago
Alright, folks. So I need your sharpest analytical minds here. You see, I kinda need a finished synopsis today so I threw one together last night and would appreciate your best criticism on it. If you ever feel at any point in the synopsis that it has dipped in interest, that it sounds jerky, or that there could be better wording, please let me…[Read more]
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Daeus started the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 7 years, 11 months ago
Alright, folks. So I need your sharpest analytical minds here. You see, I kinda need a finished synopsis today so I threw one together last night and would appreciate your best criticism on it. If you ever feel at any point in the synopsis that it has dipped in interest, that it sounds jerky, or that there could be better wording, please let me…[Read more]
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Daeus started the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 7 years, 11 months ago
Alright, folks. So I need your sharpest analytical minds here. You see, I kinda need a finished synopsis today so I threw one together last night and would appreciate your best criticism on it. If you ever feel at any point in the synopsis that it has dipped in interest, that it sounds jerky, or that there could be better wording, please let me…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Coarse language in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 11 months ago
Thanks @his-instrument @faithdk (at least I think that’s you, Faith. I can barely see you from way up here though. Haha!)
Yeah, I mostly agree with you, but I’m kinda leaning toward the safe side. It’s hard though, because I have an instance or two where it’s not just a character being frivolous. There’s a reason for it. I don’t think it’s wrong…[Read more]
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BlueJay posted an update 7 years, 11 months ago
Okay peoples I’m STUCK!!!! I need a title for a story, but I don’t want to give too much away. So basically it’s based on Jane Austen’s novels and Charles is lord of Birchwood, a magnificent estate. His *cough* comes and well, kicks him out, so to speak.
My sister suggested the title “The Annoying Guest” which would work as a chapter title, but…[Read more] -
BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
*tries to look like she knew what she was doing* —— *fails* Wow! Sounds kinda bad. I was pretty sick too as a kid. If someone caught a cold, I vomited. Not pleasant. Stress cause vomiting for me too and when you do theatre which can be extremely stressful it is not something you want. So I decided I had had enough. We went natural straight…[Read more]
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BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
Hmm *peers over glass rims* I wouldn’t be surprised if you have an iron deficiency. Sleeping was a big problem for me and I would much rather curl up on the couch with a book. I just didn’t have the energy to get through the day if I did too much. So I went on supplements to fix it and I notice my hair grew much faster. (Which is really nice) @faithdk
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BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
@faithdk Sorry, I had to go out, so I couldn’t reply.
Yeah, they might work. Let me ask you a quick few questions, but you don’t have to answer them if you don’t want to.
1. Do you feel tired a lot?
2. Do you bruise easily?
3. Is sleeping a problem?
4. Do you prefer reading a book or running around?
*the doctor sits back and smiles at you*-
Hmm… Well I’ll gladly answer your questions, Doctor @bluejay
1. Not overly so.
2. I suspect I bruise normally. I don’t have many bruises, so maybe that will answer your question.
3. Yes, it can be at times. I’d say there are about four or so days out of the week that I don’t get much sleep at all.
4. Oh, I most definitely prefer reading a…[Read more]-
Hmm *peers over glass rims* I wouldn’t be surprised if you have an iron deficiency. Sleeping was a big problem for me and I would much rather curl up on the couch with a book. I just didn’t have the energy to get through the day if I did too much. So I went on supplements to fix it and I notice my hair grew much faster. (Which is really nice) @faithdk
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I applaud you, docter. Your analysis was spot on! 😉 I do, indeed, have an iron deficiency. In fact, when I was younger, I was very sick (not solely because of the iron deficiency, but it was a factor), and was put on many medications for two years. After no improvement, and my condition worsening, my parents decided to take me off of them and…[Read more]
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*tries to look like she knew what she was doing* —— *fails* Wow! Sounds kinda bad. I was pretty sick too as a kid. If someone caught a cold, I vomited. Not pleasant. Stress cause vomiting for me too and when you do theatre which can be extremely stressful it is not something you want. So I decided I had had enough. We went natural straight…[Read more]
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Oh, that sounds awful. I’m glad to hear you’re doing well too, @bluejay. 🙂
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BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
@faithdk Haha. I think all you have to do it scroll back up and you’ll find the reply button. It will put it at the end of the conversation. My hair use to be really slow growing, but I’ve been on supplements and it is slightly faster. I would probably donate it first and then when it is slightly longer get layers.
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@bluejay Ah, okay. I don’t know why I didn’t see it… *trails off into deep thought* Anyway, that’s cool. Maybe I’ll have to look into supplements then -see if they’ll work for me. 😉
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@faithdk Sorry, I had to go out, so I couldn’t reply.
Yeah, they might work. Let me ask you a quick few questions, but you don’t have to answer them if you don’t want to.
1. Do you feel tired a lot?
2. Do you bruise easily?
3. Is sleeping a problem?
4. Do you prefer reading a book or running around?
*the doctor sits back and smiles at you*-
Hmm… Well I’ll gladly answer your questions, Doctor @bluejay
1. Not overly so.
2. I suspect I bruise normally. I don’t have many bruises, so maybe that will answer your question.
3. Yes, it can be at times. I’d say there are about four or so days out of the week that I don’t get much sleep at all.
4. Oh, I most definitely prefer reading a…[Read more]-
Hmm *peers over glass rims* I wouldn’t be surprised if you have an iron deficiency. Sleeping was a big problem for me and I would much rather curl up on the couch with a book. I just didn’t have the energy to get through the day if I did too much. So I went on supplements to fix it and I notice my hair grew much faster. (Which is really nice) @faithdk
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I applaud you, docter. Your analysis was spot on! 😉 I do, indeed, have an iron deficiency. In fact, when I was younger, I was very sick (not solely because of the iron deficiency, but it was a factor), and was put on many medications for two years. After no improvement, and my condition worsening, my parents decided to take me off of them and…[Read more]
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*tries to look like she knew what she was doing* —— *fails* Wow! Sounds kinda bad. I was pretty sick too as a kid. If someone caught a cold, I vomited. Not pleasant. Stress cause vomiting for me too and when you do theatre which can be extremely stressful it is not something you want. So I decided I had had enough. We went natural straight…[Read more]
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Oh, that sounds awful. I’m glad to hear you’re doing well too, @bluejay. 🙂
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BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
Haha. There are some children involved in the panto who are very young too. I think this year they are making the youngest level 7 years. Thank you, I’ll can tell you about it once it’s done if you like.
Okay. I have been thinking about getting my hair cut and I’m trying to find a nice style. I think I will be donating it though, so I’ll have to…[Read more] -
BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
@faithdk (Forgot to tag you)
And random question: Your hair is really pretty, do you have to style it to make it look like that or is it natural? -
BlueJay posted a new activity comment 7 years, 11 months ago
@faithdk Busy life??? It’s about to get busy for me. I have a kids convention and then a pantomime. It will be fun, but extremely full on. I’m guessing KP won’t see much of me in January. 🙂
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@bluejay basically, yes -busy life. 😛 But I am trying to get back into the writing groove again. A few blog posts are really the only writing I’ve done over the past few months, and frankly, it irks me to pieces!
Ooh, that sounds interesting. But I have never heard of a pantomime… what is it exactly?-
A pantomime is “theatrical entertainment in which words are replaced by gestures and bodily actions.” At least that’s what the dictionary says. So basically it’s more about acting your part out. Also if you are doing a Peter Pan panto he’s a girl. Please don’t ask me why, it just is. *weird* Although it did allow me to have him. And the next year…[Read more]
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@faithdk (Forgot to tag you)
And random question: Your hair is really pretty, do you have to style it to make it look like that or is it natural? -
@bluejay I see… It sounds very much like something I might have to look into further. Just recently, I’ve been thinking about acting and trying it out -see if I’m any good. I would like to use some of my stories to act out with my younger siblings, but they cannot read yet. *sighs* Good luck with the pantomine though! I wish I would be doing…[Read more]
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Haha. There are some children involved in the panto who are very young too. I think this year they are making the youngest level 7 years. Thank you, I’ll can tell you about it once it’s done if you like.
Okay. I have been thinking about getting my hair cut and I’m trying to find a nice style. I think I will be donating it though, so I’ll have to…[Read more]
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BlueJay started the topic Pride and Prejudice in the forum 7 years, 11 months ago
@graciekry @his-instrument @jess @clairec @the-happy-bookaholic @dragon-snapper @timothy-young @warrioroftherealm @winter-rose @ingridrd @aysia-serene @adry_grace @daeus @belegteleri @hope @overcomer @vanna @faithdk @kate-flournoy @jadamae @hislittlerose @hannah-krynicki @writefury @hannah-olsen @dbhgodreigns @wordfitlyspoken @hannah-c @spradlin @i…[Read more]
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BlueJay posted an update 7 years, 11 months ago
@faithdk It’s been awhile since I’ve seen you on here. 🙂 Hi *waves happily to see you again* 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Hey @bluejay! *waves back furiously* 😀 I know! Ugh, forgive me… I have been reading a few of the recent topics and posts, I just haven’t had the time to take part in any discussions. I hope that will soon change. 😉 I have missed all my fellow KeePers immensely!
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@faithdk Busy life??? It’s about to get busy for me. I have a kids convention and then a pantomime. It will be fun, but extremely full on. I’m guessing KP won’t see much of me in January. 🙂
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@bluejay basically, yes -busy life. 😛 But I am trying to get back into the writing groove again. A few blog posts are really the only writing I’ve done over the past few months, and frankly, it irks me to pieces!
Ooh, that sounds interesting. But I have never heard of a pantomime… what is it exactly?-
A pantomime is “theatrical entertainment in which words are replaced by gestures and bodily actions.” At least that’s what the dictionary says. So basically it’s more about acting your part out. Also if you are doing a Peter Pan panto he’s a girl. Please don’t ask me why, it just is. *weird* Although it did allow me to have him. And the next year…[Read more]
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@faithdk (Forgot to tag you)
And random question: Your hair is really pretty, do you have to style it to make it look like that or is it natural? -
@bluejay I see… It sounds very much like something I might have to look into further. Just recently, I’ve been thinking about acting and trying it out -see if I’m any good. I would like to use some of my stories to act out with my younger siblings, but they cannot read yet. *sighs* Good luck with the pantomine though! I wish I would be doing…[Read more]
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Haha. There are some children involved in the panto who are very young too. I think this year they are making the youngest level 7 years. Thank you, I’ll can tell you about it once it’s done if you like.
Okay. I have been thinking about getting my hair cut and I’m trying to find a nice style. I think I will be donating it though, so I’ll have to…[Read more]
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ClaireC replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years ago
@anne-of-lothlorien, So glad you love it here as much as I do! 🙂 I too have been blessed with a clean, Christian loving environment here on KP so thank you very much to everyone who makes it happen. You know who you are… 😉 So, yeah, lets thank God for KP. I always feel we ask God for a lot of things, but maybe forget to thank and praise Him as…[Read more]
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ClaireC replied to the topic Prayer Requests in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years ago
@anne-of-lothlorien, So glad you love it here as much as I do! 🙂 I too have been blesses with a clean, Christian loving environment here on KP so thank you very much to everyone who makes it happen. You know who you are… 😉 So, yeah, lets thank God for KP. I always feel we ask God for a lot of things, but maybe forget to thank and praise Him as…[Read more]
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BlueJay posted an update 8 years ago
@adry_grace, @alia, @anna-brie, @anne-of-lothlorien, @cahndida-serkhaman, @charisetter, @zoe-wingfeather, @christi-eaton, @clairec, @winter-rose, @warrioroftherealm, @writefury, @emma-flournoy, @reaganramm, @rolena-hatfield, @julia-r, @his-instrument, @ingridrd, @ivy-rose, @the-happy-bookaholic, @timothy-young, @belegteleri, @theliterarycrusader,…[Read more]
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Ignore my spelling errors. 🙁 I’m terrible at checking my own writing.
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*puts on thinking cap* Hrmmm… well, the first game that comes to mind is Blindman’s Bluff. Then there’s a similar but less ‘dangerous’ game that doesn’t have a name, where ‘It’ stands blindfolded in the middle of the room and one player at a time tries to sneak past (and around) him without getting touched.
And honestly I have zero head for…[Read more]-
Thanks for the other game suggestions. Yes, I’ve played that once before and it was lots of fun. @kate-flournoy
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Do you mean the theme would be spiritual blindness, and you’d just play physically ‘blind’ games, or would the theme be physical blindness (probably not, but I want to make sure I get what you’re saying. 😉 )?
And ditto to what Kate said about fundraising…sorry. 😛 Have some sort of craft sale, maybe? *helpless shrug*-
No @emma-flournoy The theme is about physical blindness as that is what the fundraiser would be for. Helping raise money for tablets that stop River Blindness.
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@bluejay, so sorry, no ideas at the moment, but I’ll let you know if I think of something. 🙂
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@clairec No worries. Please do. 🙂
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Okay. That sounds good. 🙂 What’s River Blindness?
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@emma-flournoy River Blindness is cause by black flies that live down near the river. So people go do to get water and…how much information would you like??? It’s pretty graphic.
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Ooh… all right, that’s good.
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I hope your fundraiser goes well if you do it.
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Hmmm…. that’s a great thing to raise funds for, @bluejay! Who will you be giving the money to? (i.e. Compassion, Samaritan’s Purse, a missionary at your church, etc.) Well, the only games I can think of that haven’t already been suggested would be searching through something like rice, blindfolded, to find a small object, like a marble, pebble,…[Read more]
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@julia-r The funds will be going to CBM.
Hey, I like that game. You say you’ve done similar games before, can you tell me how much rice would you put in the dish (how big is the dish) and are they allowed to use their hands?-
I would get a really big storage container (like utility bins) and fill it with as much rice as you can. Rice is cheap, so it shouldn’t be a cost issue. And yes, you can use your hands! It’s fun to rely only on touch to find things.
Another similar suggestion (this might appeal more to younger folks) is to put the pieces of a 6-piece puzzle in the…[Read more]
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@bluejay Would it be indoors or outdoors? I know two games that raise money, but they don’t have a thing to do with blindness. You know the type of game where you try to throw a small object either into a basket or through a small hole in a board or to knock something down? You could charge 25 or 50 cents per toss. The other game is quite a bit…[Read more]
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@sarah-h It would be indoors. Thank you SO much for all the wonderful ideas. I have decided not to run the fundraiser so a bit because I am so busy with prier commitments. But the ideas are wonderful and will be in a file for future reference.
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Mark Kamibaya replied to the topic Favorite Movies in the forum Film 8 years ago
I’ve been studying up on theme. Especially in movies. So I was wondering if you could give: Two movies that have, in your opinion, extremely powerful themes. If you could also give why those movies have such great themes or how they made the theme awesome then that would be even better.
Now I’m not talking about themes like “Peace is better than…[Read more]
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Mark Kamibaya replied to the topic Favorite Movies in the forum Film 8 years ago
I’ve been studying up on theme. Especially in movies. So I was wondering if you could give: Two movies that have, in your opinion, extremely powerful themes.
Now I’m not talking about powerful themes like “Peace is better than war because true peace isn’t tainted by man.” That’s a decent enough theme. Great even. But it isn’t necessarily powerful…[Read more]
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You could just call it “Lord of Birchwood.” I don’t know. Just a suggestion. Or you could call it *Cough*, since that seems to be a theme in your story. 😉
What is the genre?
@bluejay Uh oh… even the KP doctor has a cough. D’you think it’s from all that smoke from my melting the chairs yesterday? 😛
Lords of the Will
Birchwood Problems
The Lord of Birchwood
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*hands you cough medicine* Sorry, that’s all I could come up with for now.
@dragon-snapper Yes, that smoke was terrible. So please don’t do that again. Ooo cough medicine, thank you. You know, if you were nice tempered, I could take you on as a nurse. 😉
@his-instrument Hehe. The genre…hard question since I’m not great with genres, but just think Pride and Prejudice. 🙂
How about “The Will of Birchwood”?
Or does that sound too much like a name???? :S
@bluejay
The title “The Birchwood Will” might work, if you think that “The Will of Birchwood” doesn’t work. 🙂
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http://jacksonegraham.wixsite.com/jackson-e-graham
Hmm…a second on Lord of Birchwood.
hmm, I’m not sure, but here are some questions that might help you choose.
What lesson does the character learn?
What’s one word that could sum up the story’s conflict?
Is there anything extremely unusual about your characters or the situations they find themselves in?
What are common words used in titles for the book’s genre? (romance, I assume.…[Read more]