Faith Kindred

Show the reader why the bad guy is doing what he’s doing. If the reader understands that, then they will feel for him, even though what the man does may be bad. Take Rumple in Once Upon A Time. He is very bad…he’ll kill people who go against him without a thought and has intricate plans and curses; and yet you discover that he’s doing this to…[Read more]

If you can do the cinematic things, submit the cinematic things. *nodding* Cinematic things are super cool.

@Tatiana Oh wow! Yeah, that’s a great point. XD Thanks so much for the suggestion! And go for the poetry things! It’s a lot of fun, and if you do free verse, it’s something that doesn’t take a lot of time to do! 😀

Yes— exactly. Of course you need some details— give the readers a starting point, and guide them throughout as you would with any other scene, but my point is you don’t have to take every agonizing turn of the rack, every sizzle of the branding iron, or every snap of the lash in slow motion. That is conducive to nothing but stomachaches.

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Yes. Definitely. Chewy’s body language is very good. In fact it’s probably better he didn’t speak. Then words don’t get in the way of whatever emotion he’s trying to get across.
If he had confessed he was worried about Han out in the freezing snow instead of moaning softly and bowing his head against one of the Falcon’s ladders, we would have had…[Read more]

@Daeus — Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, lines things are something I like playing around with, but don’t always get it “right.” xD

@Shaina — Awesome! Thanks for sharing. I really like this poem! I would almost play around with capitalization with the “ands” to provide almost a false sense of a broken continuation of the sentence before like an…[Read more]

@Daeus — Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, lines things are something I like playing around with, but don’t always get it “right.” xD

@Shaina — Awesome! Thanks for sharing. I really like this poem! I would almost play around with capitalization with the “ands” to provide almost a false sense of a broken continuation of the sentence before like an…[Read more]

Wow, Sarah that’s… that’s… I like that. It’s not exactly a poem, but it’s not exactly anything else. It’s very unique.

The only thing I would suggest has nothing to do with the rhythm of the poem. In fact I’m only nitpicking, so feel free to ignore me. All through the poem I was going, ‘wow, this is great, this is so insightful— I feel like…[Read more]

I know, that is what I was talking about.

Would Chewy be so neat if he said “There is not enough headroom”?
We love him, and understand “GAAAAAAHHHH!” means that^ Because of body language.
I think that is another thing that makes Starr Wars good.

That’s pretty cool. I might have put some lines together that were separate, but I don’t have much else to say.

Of course it is veerry free verse, and I’m not even sure myself if it is poetry, but it sounds good, so who cares if it is poetry?

…but you do want some details or it won’t seem like torture. Just give them a starting point. Your readers can imagine the rest.

I’d say go with it for torture and murder and suicide and all that stuff. But who wants a nightmare? Don’t give your reader a nightmare.

Well I’m not exactly the kind of person who enjoys reading something that terrifying, at least not that terrifying in a dark, spine chilling, twisted sort of way. So… I don’t have a ton of ideas on this.

But… you did mention torture. I’m not big into graphic details of anything disgusting, but that doesn’t mean I’m against having anything…[Read more]

Hey Mark,

I understand we already have holograms of a sort, but it is my understanding that these are actually two dimensional even though they look three dimensional and look just like they would in real life no matter which angle you are looking at them. This new hologram however is actually 3d. It is also very advanced from what I heard. My…[Read more]

You know you’re a writer when you’re on two different forums, and each has this exact topic…

Exactly.
When you are at camp and have more writing utensils then the rest of the cabin combined.

Currently, both sides carry a mix of what we’d consider regular weapons with ‘hard’ ammo (though they are faster and stronger) and laser guns (which really are a thing nowadays…in my book they are better and more expensive than the other weapons). I’ve abandoned the idea of plasma guns, because they aren’t realistic, but do you have any other i…

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Hey you may have it there, Mark. Good analysis.

That was another thing I liked about Star Wars— even the characters who didn’t speak (whistle, gurgle, bleep bleep, and Gah! don’t count as speaking, at least not in my book) had personalities. They weren’t just droids or wookiees— they were people, even if they weren’t.

Doesn’t that make all…[Read more]

They hover using magnetic technology…

You could also get the same result using cats with pieces of buttered bread tied to their backs. Since buttered bread always lands butter side down, and cats always land on their feet, the two opposing forces would create a single hovering entity, each force struggling for the mastery, and each unable to…[Read more]