Faith Kindred

Yeah, that sounds much better. The only thing I can really pick at is the second to last line. It’s too short so it flies by you without taking its affect. All you really need is one more syllable.

Um… maybe some sort of infrared vision goggles? Something like the Navy Seals have (at least I think it’s the Navy Seals)— the goggles that detect body heat and send back images through walls based solely on the heat they’re picking up. That could be cool.

Thanks, @sarah-h! I’ll post the revised version and see if I got all the kinks out.

The Coming Dawn

Long we have stood
In the shadow and mist;
Deep is the darkness
Around us.
Black is the night,
And hard is the road,
And cruel are the foes
That surround us.
Hard is our fate,
And bitter our lot,
And cold is the night
And the darkness.
The…[Read more]

Yes! Me too! It’s almost become an unspoken contest to see who can read books like that the most dramatically. 😀
The only problem is, when everybody else starts laughing, you start laughing, and then you can’t keep reading!

@rolena-hatfield— your first attempt sounds actually much better than mine. It actually sounds like it would work out— like it would actually hold someone’s interest fairly well. Good for you!

@wordfitlyspoken: a family of dandelions and wild daisies, huh? Sounds… um… creative! 😛
I know exactly what you mean by ‘write the story you want…[Read more]

Speaking of children’s books… did anyone ever read Cork and Fuzz?

Oh I love Amelia Bedelia! Those were the best books for reading to younger siblings cause if I was real dramatic about how I read them, I could get my younger siblings rolling on the floor with laughter. 🙂

You know Rolena, all you need is an illustrator and you’ve got a children’s book.

I was about 9 when I wrote my first story that was literally one page long. I know I still have it somewhere around here… I could never bear to throw any of my stories away, no matter how awful they were 🙂
Anyway, my first story started out with this line “A mother loon flew over a shimmering moon lit lake…” and it goes on to tell about a…[Read more]

No, but I’m not very surprised about the similarities between dagger fighting and wrestling. Actually, many fighting forms have great similarities and all at least some. Boxing for instance actually developed from people trying to fence without swords when dueling was illegal. Of course pugilism has always been around, but I mean boxing as we know…[Read more]

I’m reviving this topic so I don’t have to make a new one.

And I have a question. A while back I looked up a lot of basic tutorials on all sorts of bladed weapons, just to get a few tips and such, and I noticed that a lot of the dagger techniques are very similar to wrestling techniques.
Does anyone here know anything about that? Or anything…[Read more]

That… is totally adorable. And I completely know what it is to idolize your first works as something incredible, something that will change lives and draw people to the light… and then you go back and read them a few years later and you’re just like… ‘what was I thinking?’

But hey! It had to start somewhere.

There were two that I made when I was around 7 or 8. One was, I quote: “THE GiNENT: A TALE ov FAiTH”.
It was about 2 guys who were walking along and see a giant (the titular “Ginent”). The guy who doesn’t believe in God runs away and the giant stomps on him. The guy who does believe in God stops in his tracks, kneels down and prays.
After the…[Read more]

Frog and Toad.

I can’t believe I forgot, Amelia Bedelia! My favorite children’s books.

With writing, you can edit your words before you publish them.

I was thinking “will have corrected people”. Is that a British thing?

@Daeus… a talking donkey that appointed the pope to be archbishop of Canterbury. Hm. Well, you certainly went after the creative part, didn’t you? 😀
And YES. It is frightening, when I go back to my first ‘novel’ and read it, to find that it is practically a clone of Henty style and Henty plot. *pout* It’s not funny in the least.

@ivy-rose aw…[Read more]