Faith Kindred

Sure @jadamae

I’d just do some little things to make it flow better. First of all, I’d agree with what Kate said, so I won’t repeat it. Here are my ideas:

Stanza 1, line 4: Might shorten to “Some fast, some slow”

Stanza 2, line 2: Take out the “the” at the beginning

Stanza 3, line 3: Add “them” to the end.
Line 4: Take off “Many” from the…[Read more]

@Daeus— Verily, saidst thou? Pray, what is this verily of which thou speakest, brother? Methinks thou dost speak of some… some word of olden times, but alas! I have no skill in the understanding of such antiquated languages… thy ‘verily’ hath quite overcome me…

*claps hand over mouth, smothers hysterical snicker*

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@Daeus— Verily, saidst thou? Pray, what is this verily of which thou speakest, brother? Methinks thou dost speak of some… some word of olden times, but alas! I have no skill in the understanding of such antiquated languages… thy ‘verily’ hath quite overcome me…

*claps hand over mouth, smothers hysterical snicker*

Sorry, couldn’t resist. 😉

It’s quite beautiful— love the title! A few lines I would change, just for the sake of better rhythm. The first is

Spotlights shine on the scene

I would just replace ‘on’ with ‘upon’. And the last line of that stanza… I’m not sure which would work better, or if either would work best at all. You might try saying something about a ‘dream’…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy “Yea Sister, verily.”

Hey, glad it was helpful guys! I should just start a topic called ‘mistakes’ and post all the writing mistakes I make in that one. 😉

@Jadamae… well… I’ve got several lined up already, but I’m not about to turn anyone away if they’re interested… 😀 I just hate shoving my work off on other people so I don’t like to ask. 😛 😉

KeePers of the Kingdom? 😉

Grace, peace, and high word counts to you, my brothers! And… er… sisters.

*laughs hysterically*

That’s awesome, @Daeus!

Nope. Didn’t work. I’ll just give you the link. https://www.pinterest.com/pin/341710690457182648/

Love it, @bluejay! Looking at that prompt, I couldn’t decide whether it was a sword on his back or the pipes of a bagpipe. 😛 I ended up not mentioning it at all, and I guess that was fine. 😉

Now let’s see if I can figure out the ‘image’ setting so I can post the picture and you can actually see what I’m talking about. Here goes…

@kate-flournoy, Good to know! I know I’ve said this before, but thanks for sharing your mistakes with us so we don’t make the same ones. 🙂 Congratulations on finishing your novel!!!!!

@kate-flournoy Yeah, totally get that. One thing I’ve started the habit of doing is keeping a list of all the little things that could become important later. Never just let it drop when the character sticks something in their pocket, meets a stranger or something little like that. 😛

@writefury
This is an awesome idea! 🙂 🙂 🙂

@bluejay, The suspense is killing me! What happens to the man? XD

@writefury, what a great idea!

@Daeus, Oh my word, that’s an awesome name! 🙂

@daeus YESSSS XD
But we do need an entrance ceremony or something, @faithdk. I’ll get on that. 😉

@kate-flournoy
Okay, wow! This is so good! Amen, sister… 🙂

@sarah-h, Probably the best way to do that without paying for Google promoting and whatnot is to fill up the art forum. 🙂 We can also share the word on social media. Currently, we don’t have any cool graphics, but since you brought it up, if you want to try your hand at one, I can at least publish it on Facebook. ;D No pressure–just an idea!

And now I finally get to write. I’m going to see how much I can get done before the end of the hour. I had to bake a cake.

@bluejay I’m not sure if I was working super fast since I was actually rewriting, not writing. I’m editing a novella of mine right now. I did add probably 250-300 words though and that with a lot of attention to perfection and working out how to best make what I had written before come alive and be tangible. I certainly felt very on track.

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