Faith Kindred

Eh… that might be a bit of a reach. 😉

Let’s see. *waits for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*still waits for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*continues to wait for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*concludes that there is no such thing as a bolt from the blue, and as for inspiration, it is a fallacious fairytale our teachers…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy Great minds post at the same time? xD It still rhymes. 😀

Probably! Give it a go and then read it out loud. If it flows out loud, usually it flows in the brain. Your family may judge you a little, but it works. xD

We were posting at the same time @spradlin! 😀

Thanks for the pointers— I can see how that would be a problem, definitely. Would it work, do you think, to cut each line in half, where most of them have a slant rhyme with the middle of the prior line?

Thanks, @Daeus and @faithdk!

Couple questions, Daeus… ‘toil’ is a one syllable word. ???
Also, I’m not quite sure what you meant about replacing ‘cruel’ with ‘and’… I can’t seem to grasp what specific changes you were getting at.
And… oh yeah. Oops. He did lose his shield, didn’t he? *gulp* Man, that’s embarrassing. 😛
All your other…[Read more]

First off, kudos for writing such a long poem! I am a huge fan of long poems. It’s also an accomplishment.

Thoughts: The lines are kind of long, so it’s hard for me to get everything out of each line. I’d also say try and break it up a little more stanza wise. I think the biggest thing you have to conquer in long poems is making them seem less…[Read more]

@zoe-wingfeather Awwww! Thanks, girl! I’ll post it here as soon as I make it. 😀

@writefury 😀 Gotta stick them poetic musings somewhere. ;D I like the alliteration with that one.

What about “Writing My Themesong” or something and I could make a connection to the “notes” on a piece of music, ‘cuz I like music too. xD Or is that too much of a reach?

Sweet! It’s about time you got a blog, @spradlin! 😉
Hmm… Notecards & Novelists maybe? I’ll keep thinking.

@kate-flournoy

First of all, let me just repeat that this is a great poem – not to mention long, which I is something I can never manage.

Also first of all, make sure all your lines have a capital first letter.

Now for the many other first of alls:

but he never once forsook the field; forsook the toil or tears.

Replace “toil” with a one…[Read more]

There was a thread on this a while ago. You can check it out below. Mine’s on there though I still haven’t decided whether it is actually a blog or not. https://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/any-bloggers-out-there/

Oh, and @overcomer… 😛 😉

@spradlin, @hislittlerose, @jadamae… you guys are all poets. What do you think?

Okay @Daeus, @hope, @anyone-else-who-liked this, I’ve been working over it, and I think I’ve got it finished. I want to publish it with KP, but I want to know what you guys think of it first. Without further ado, here it is in it’s entirety.

And just because, here’s the link to the music I was listening to when I wrote the last verse. I think it…[Read more]

@daeus You are da bomb! All of these sound pretty awesome, to be honest. 🙂 I really like “Magic Box of Notecards” 😀 I shall continue thinking too.

@bluejay will respond tomorrow.

Notecards in the clouds
limitless thoughts on limitless stuff.
The winged notecard.
Magic box of notecards
Lines on an unruled notecard
My note cards – lots of them

…um, maybe I can think of something better.

Coming from you, I’m sure it’s great.

Thanks @faithdk. That’s really sweet of you. Hopefully it will work out so you can read it. It is 6,686 words at the moment, which is my longest story yet.

Wow, that’s an interesting fact about Ohio and Indiana.

Thanks @hope. Yep. That will work really well. I appreciate it.

@bluejay I live about an hour from the border…what is close? Edgerton, IN is right smack on the border. It’s zipcode is 46797. There is a main street, center street, railroad street, Dawkins road, Bertha street, a church, and not much else. 😉

You can get city names and zipcodes and all that with Googlemaps.