Faith Kindred

@kate-flournoy Wow. Just reading a summary of that climax is beautiful. I am a firm believer of the fact that the climax makes or breaks the story’s climax, and at least on paper, you certainly seem to have that climax down. Other elements may need some work, but you’ve got the core down beautifully.

My one thought on the climax is that Denholm…[Read more]

@hope I see. Yeah, this gets into the tricky parts of fiction writing where everything isn’t as analyze-able as we might like it to be. =P I could see it as being either a second related EiL, or simply her deciding to expand her current EiL to include more than it did otherwise. In gray areas like this, you should probably go with whatever makes…[Read more]

@Daeus good. 😛
Sure. Sure. I’ll believe that when I see it.

And I hope you’re right. *nods solemnly*
Ack! Now I’m starting to sound like you. Haha! XD

@Daeus eeeep! Sorry! I didn’t tag you so it isn’t my fault! 😛

Okay though, great points. Yes. You’re right. Maybe because my grasp on that is too shallow… *groans**bangs head against the wall* HAROLD HAD BETTER APPRECIATE THE MENTAL AGONY I’M GOING THROUGH FOR HIS SAKE.
Okay. *settles down* I must definitely do brainstorming on that. Oh…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy Ack! Can’t look at climax! *turns away*

Ok, so, for everything else, what I noticed is that it includes a lot about the plot, but the parts about how that external journey affected his inner journey were too vague. I think the main thing is you didn’t state Harold’s EIL. I assume Harold does have at least one positive arc. If so,…[Read more]

Character’s story goal is to find his place in the world. It’s a coming-of-age. Yep, a disillusionment arc coming-of-age. 😛 I didn’t do it on purpose so don’t ask me how it happened. lol
Anyway. His more tangible goal is to find the one man who was kind to him after something particularly tragic happened in his past, and he believes that wherever…[Read more]

Character’s story goal is to find his place in the world. It’s a coming-of-age. Yep, a disillusionment arc coming-of-age. 😛 I didn’t do it on purpose so don’t ask me how it happened. lol
Anyway. His more tangible goal is to find the one man who was kind to him after something particularly tragic happened in his past, and he believes that wherever…[Read more]

@ethryndal I’m going to take a break now. I may be back, but I have to decide what I’m going to do next.

@ethryndal Cool. Here we go.

Hey, y’all. I’ll be writing for a bit if anyone wants to join.

@Ethryndal *gives you moral support and commiseration* I had to rewrite my entire WIP as well. It seemed impossible at the start, but now I’m almost done and though it still makes me want to tear my hair out sometimes it’s really not so bad. It gets better, dear. It does. We promises. 😉

@hope It seems that you have two character arcs in your story. One, a positive arc on trust. Two, a disillusionment about the sureness of temporal victory. There might be a third one around responsibility (her growing to consider herself responsible for more than just those she loves), but I doubt it because she doesn’t seem to change in that…[Read more]

@Aratrea The second experiment in living is built off the first. In the first, victory is merely defined by keeping everyone she loves safe. In the second, she has added an element of physical freedom and the overthrow of tyranny as qualifications for victory because she is convinced that the original goal of safety for those she loves will never…[Read more]

@Aratrea The second experiment in living is built off the first. In the first, victory is merely defined by keeping everyone safe. In the second, she has added an element of physical freedom and the overthrow of tyranny as qualifications for victory because she is convinced that the original goal of safety for those she loves will never come…[Read more]

@hope That’s a great point that hasn’t been brought up yet! Those sorts of instructive moments can definitely change someone. They’re a bit trickier to use in novel form since it’s really easy for that to become a preaching moment, but I think it can be done when you do it in a way that’s true to the instructor’s character. I think I discuss that…[Read more]