Karina Sanchez

Jetpacks, how could I forget? Yes, jetpacks. We already have them of course, but they are expensive and don’t work very well. But give us 200 years and I think we could develop a model t jet pack.

Personally I prefer both reading and writing 3rd person. I like to develop all the characters on an intimate level, and you can’t get that level of character development with 1st person.

You can get good development with 1st person, it’s just you need a LOT more material to do it. You can’t show a simple scene through each character’s POV.…[Read more]

‘For all things live, and and all things die’

“A plea of,”Rest” is carried on the breeze”

“No searching is required”

But it would be very hard to control with precision to say the least. Who knows though, it might be done.

‘To know that Love, and see that Love’

Hm, first I thought this was going to be a nature poem, but why not go with both?
So what do we have so far?

‘When Autumn winds excite the leaves
and whisper through the fading grass,
When raindrops tumble off the eaves,
Then, I feel at home.

For wind and rain and leaf and tree
speak of Love much greater…[Read more]

A wipe of the eyes sounds believable. Maybe even tears, but the fact that he never knew his father before would work against that.

‘For wind and rain and leaf and tree’

This is going to be either a crowning achievement or a crowning mess. Who cares which one? The point is to do it. This is fun!

Great great, now we need to go somewhere. We need a “then …” type of line.

Oops— whisper, not whispers. Sorry.

‘You know you’re a writer when you have pages and pages of sentences and ideas for stories that you will write someday.’

YES.

Normal people have no idea…

“And whispers through the fading grass”

Good idea, Daeus. This should be at once ridiculously fun and instructive.

@Tatiana Poetry is awesome, poetry is stirring, poetry is fun, poetry helps you write better, poetry is not that hard.

@Sarah Spradlin Just to let you know, the last three lines were my favorite part. I wouldn’t change them. They tie the poem together.

Yes— exactly. Of course you need some details— give the readers a starting point, and guide them throughout as you would with any other scene, but my point is you don’t have to take every agonizing turn of the rack, every sizzle of the branding iron, or every snap of the lash in slow motion. That is conducive to nothing but stomachaches.

And…[Read more]

Yes. Definitely. Chewy’s body language is very good. In fact it’s probably better he didn’t speak. Then words don’t get in the way of whatever emotion he’s trying to get across.
If he had confessed he was worried about Han out in the freezing snow instead of moaning softly and bowing his head against one of the Falcon’s ladders, we would have had…[Read more]

Wow, Sarah that’s… that’s… I like that. It’s not exactly a poem, but it’s not exactly anything else. It’s very unique.

The only thing I would suggest has nothing to do with the rhythm of the poem. In fact I’m only nitpicking, so feel free to ignore me. All through the poem I was going, ‘wow, this is great, this is so insightful— I feel like…[Read more]

That’s pretty cool. I might have put some lines together that were separate, but I don’t have much else to say.

Of course it is veerry free verse, and I’m not even sure myself if it is poetry, but it sounds good, so who cares if it is poetry?