Karina Sanchez

What does that mean, anyway? Existential crisis? What IS that?

@sarah-h Those are some great ideas. And you said “I personally plan to prodoce this machine under the name Iflex.” Seriously? Do you have the skills to do that? Wow. Impressive. I’d love to get one of those.

I thought I’d just say a couple things. First of all, if these guys have drone cameras connected to their phones, they are going to have…[Read more]

Oh yes, that was so me.

I’d just point out a couple lines that don’t flow right other than those Kate mentioned.

Escape with whatever you’ve got
Just be careful and try not to fall.
“Scootch” in “Scootch away in a laundry bin”

There should be a rule against mentioning food on the forum.

But, my that’s funny.

poison

Apples. Apples. Apples. Cinnamon. Ahh…

Your mom is in the kitchen preparing to can her special recipe of cinnamon apples.

You come into the kitchen and notice the brilliant red solution she has prepared to soak the apples in.

Your first thought is POISON.

You know you’re a writer.

Hm… try giving the floor a character. Benign. Gentle. Winning. Peaceful. ‘Don’t be fooled by the floor’s peaceful looks…’

I don’t know, what do you think?

Makes sense. Got it completely.

Hm. But I thought that was all a given.

It is, after all, called… get this… a cliffhanger.

That pr-etty much sums it up.

In my opinion.

Which has been wrong on more than one occasion. 😛

But how much is too much and how tense is too tense?
I don’t think you should leave off with absolutely NOTHING…[Read more]

*Bites nails, hovers on edge of seat and tears and frazzled hair* Come on Ezra! What were you going to say? Huh? HUH!? Tell me!!!!!! I WANNA KNOW! Don’t leave me in suspense!!!!!!!!!!

Wow, I didn’t catch that at all. Nice one Ezra. Oh, that’s fun.

OOOOOOOOOOhhhhhhhhhhhhhh… wait. I get it now.

It was a cliff hanger. 😛

XD. Niiiiiiiiiiiiiice, Ezra.

Perhaps you would condescend to enlighten me, Daniel.

@Daeus— no, it’s actually by an author who has a lot of similarities with Douglas Bond— John J. Horn. Have you heard of him?

Okay, thanks for explaining your cliffhanger. That makes sense too. I see what you’re saying.

Thanks for joining us, @Ezra-wilkinson! Ahem… I trust you have something to contribute…?

😉

@Ezra-Wilkinson, was that your finished thought?

The boy colonel, is that Douglas Bond?

Anyway, I should probably explain that cliff hanger I mentioned. I’ll spoil the whole movie, but that doesn’t matter since it’s not worth watching anyways. Basically, in the story America has become ridiculously fascist and there is also this generator some lady found that could create free limitless…[Read more]

Good thoughts, @hope!

@Daeus, it sounds like you might be talking about ending on a cliffhanger right in the middle of an action scene. That’s probably not a good idea, because everything has been going at such a fast pace that an end will fall on you like a thunderclap and leave you screaming without any motivation to go on. Because, if anyone…[Read more]

Oh my, this brings back so many memories! I used to do this ALL THE TIME when I was younger, only it wasn’t lava— it was a river full of poisonous leeches. 😛

I noticed a few lines that could have flowed better. For one,

Balancing on the wall trimming works for a bit

Try ‘To walk on the wall trim will work for a bit’

Also,

Guys, that…

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Having said that, yeah, you absolutely don’t need to end your book with a tie in to your title. *Cough cough Monte Cristo cough Tale cough cough cough Cities cough* (The answer to all writing questions). Also, trying to force such an ending is a bad idea.

However …

If you can get it to work well, it can be especially powerful. If so, your…[Read more]

Whatever you do don’t end with a cliff hanger like they had in Atlas Shrugged part 2! (Um, yeah, I only watched part 2, not 1 or 3, just 2. Yeah. Totally not worth it.) It finished with such a ginormous cliff hanger that I was just sickened. The surprise was so big, I got angry. I started to hear that type of music and saw the characters enter a…[Read more]

Fly drones. buzzzzz smack. Ok, maybe not.