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@inkling-for-christ Yes, that’s exactly it. SHOW the environment, don’t have the narrator TELL the reader what it looks like. Have it be more like you’re looking directly through the narrator into the story, rather than that they’re trying to summarize what they saw for you and tell it back to you

@emily-d I really, really liked A Wrinkle In Time

It was  thoughtful, meaningful, almost spiritual, and it had a lot of intriguing symbolism and thing s like that. Open respect for Christianity, too, although it did mention the good qualities of other religions.

Plus, Meg and Calvin are really great characters. Meg’s internal conflicts are easy…[Read more]

@emily-d  I got through like a third of the book before I… got bored of it. It’s intriguing, and very well-written, but there’s barely any action, just talking. And talking. And talking. Is suppose if I read the rest of it I would change my mind…… But it’s been awhile, and I think I’d have to start over at the very beginning.

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@emily-d 😀 Yeah, I have read it

I was at first expecting to completely hate it

But, I actually really like it

Elizabeth is a great character, and the plot is interesting, and Jane Austen’s writing is really sophisticated and intelligent

It’s lacking all of its dragons, and 100% percent of its epic battle scenes, but it’s still quite…[Read more]

@winter-rose I love the updated one

I think there needs to be something more connecting the first sentence with the second, though.

It would work great early on to have

Another bodyguard would give anything to protect a lady from the Slate family.

BUT Cocky Rook Warren is afraid of girls, or at least that’s what his fellow bodyguards a…

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@inkling-for-christ  Everything that the course teaches about showing and the techniques to use it more effectively, for example, body language, can be transferred into first person just by changing what the character says, for example

“I walked down the hall slowly, feeling nervous (telling)

would change to

“I shuffled down the hall, my hands…[Read more]

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@Winter-rose perfect. 🙂

@winter-rose Oh, I like this one! Hmm, I think it’s fine with or without “whether it’s by frustrating his ward and…etc.”

How about instead of ending with, “Another bodyguard would give anything to protect a wealthy lady from Telir, but not Rook,” reword it to “Another bodyguard would give anything to protect Amy, but not Rook” (since you’ve…[Read more]

@emily-d No, I’m afraid I haven’t read this one either. I have a friend who adores Jane Austen books, but as for myself, I’m not particularly fond of books with a strong romantic slant.

Oh by the way, thank you for introducing me to Sigmund Brouwer! 😃 I received one of his books for Christmas (Robot Wars: Death Trap) and I enjoyed it so much I…[Read more]

@itisastarrynight It’s a book with illustrations. 🙂 It’s a middle-grade book about a scientist who travels back in time to the dinosaur age. I’ve finished all but one of the illustrations for the first book, but I haven’t done any for the second and only one for the third.

Here’s one from the first book:

@jenwriter17 That makes two of us. 😉 You might also like Laramie, Wagon Train, and Cheyenne because they are westerns. It’s kind of funny, for the longest time I did not like westerns at all. The only westerns I’d seen were ones like Gunsmoke and I thought all westerns were like that. Then my mom got Bonanza from the library and I was hooked after…[Read more]

@supermonkey42 Don’t feel too bad (this gingerbread house was prebuilt). 🙃 However, a couple years ago I made a gingerbread house from the walls up, and although it turned out okay in the end, I had trouble keeping the roof from caving in. 😂

@dragon-snapper Torturing people is fun (and torturing dragons is even more fun). 😜

@winter-rose eh… close enough. ;P

@jenwriter17 well first of all, I must have somehow missed your introduction cuz I don’t remember saying hello. Hello, and welcome. 😉 I’m an old timer here, but I haven’t been around much lately due to crazy life. I’m so pleased to see new faces filling in.

Writing goals… *whimpering laugh*

Oh boy.

1. FINALLY get the third draft of the book…

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@Winter-Rose nineteen this coming March… how close are we? 😛

@eamily I’ve yet to read it, but my friend loves it, and none of her recommendations have fallen short, so I have good reason to believe I’ll enjoy it. 🙂

By the way, thanks for including me in these books discussions. I love talking books! 😀

@emily I think I’ll have to read it again. I don’t remember much of it, but I do think I know what you mean about not connecting with the characters. But I think it was a fun read, very different to stuff I’d read before.

Also, let me try Mariposa’s tag… @mariposa