Emma

*screams*
@Ethryndal aaauuuuggghhhh!!! I’m dying! *chokes on her laughter and topples over off her chair and goes into spasms on the floor*

PERFECT. Absolutely perfect.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 could you give me the link to the doc again? Mine is doing weird things.

That sounds like a great solution. Good job. I notice you’re thinking in wider perspectives now— purposefully using the interactions to develop or manipulate. *wiggles eyebrows* Excellent work, my young padawan. 😉

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@Daeus it just doesn’t like me. 😀

Okay @Daeus my post does not appear to be showing up. My guess is it got spammed.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That-Writer_Girl_99 wow, that took an unexpected turn. 😛 I love it. Good job with the prose. 😉
You’re right though, the shift in Matthias is pretty obvious.
And… that might actually be a problem. It’s perfectly fine for him to change his personality as you write him; that’s not what I’m worried about. It’s that the Matthias we meet first and…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 well I’m here now. XD *folds hands primly**ahem* You had a question?

*shakes head* You guys… XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 YAY!!! *tackles you and smothers you in blankets and pillows* We knew you could do it! Way to go! *fuscia confetti*

@Dragon-Snapper lol! XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 nope. Not yet. I want to get him good and proper in my head before I try it. 😉

@Anne-Of-Lothlorien too late. 😀

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yep. And thoughts are actually the least necessary of those three. Oftentimes I just cut them out and let the actions tell the story. Emotions and actions go a long way to cluing people in on what someone’s thinking. 😉 😛

Yeah… maybe it means easy as eating pie? XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *hugs you*

Thanks @DelightInLife. 😀 It took me forever to get that actually… :/

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I didn’t write that, and I don’t think I can right now. I’m not that good.

*wise Yoda look* That— is why you fail.

*goes off into gales of smothered laughter* Okay, okay… so it’s not that drastic. I have a reputation to live up to apparently, though, so… *shrugs*

No, you’ve got enough humility to sink a ship.…[Read more]

@Daeus awesome. I got 506 words written. 🙂 See ya.

Also, see how much I told you by not telling? *grins*

@That_Writer_Girl_99 Ahhh… yes. You’re POV telling. That makes it boring and dull; you’re right. See, what you’re doing is giving us Kara’s thoughts instead of showing us her emotions through the way she acts. Instead of doing this:

That was strange. I think to myself as I—finally—enter my cell. I wonder what Matthias was talking about?
I tak…

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