Emma Flournoy

@Catwing well I was away last night and this morning, so I failed to see this until just now, sorry. xD Looks like you’ve have lots of great advice though. 😀
I second what Louise said–her rewritten synopsis of suggestions is basically what I would’ve said myself. 😛

@catwing I think I like the second one better, but with a few tweaks (all suggestions of course 😉 ).

Alex is not normal. She talks with her wolves. And understands them.
Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who gives them a riddle from a long dead tyrant. They must save Allore by finding three jewels, and giving them to…[Read more]

@ingridrd @dragon-snapper @aislinn-mollisong Awesome collages!

@mariposa So glad you asked! 😀
It’s a Utopian Science Fiction, the setting is Earth in the 22nd century.

@emily

How do you make it have that bar thing before something that you copy from another section?

Select the text and click the B-QUOTE button.

GUYS, THESE ARE ALL SO COOL!! ~ the sorta silent stalker of this page and awol member of this glorious kingdom

You guys these are so awesome!!! Great job all!
*steeples fingers* And now thou have all inspired me to make another.
I give you a collage for a new book which will be a standalone that I probably won’t get to until next year (AAAAHHHH WHY? GRR!) Anyway, yes. I absolutely cannot wait to write it and I think it’ll probably be my most thematically…[Read more]

@Aislinn-Mollisong got it. 🙂 You did mention that you weren’t going to use that in the final, but I wanted to make sure. They’re fine to use for fun, but if you’re going to use them commercially in any way… yep. Copyrights. 😉

Awesome! Show it to me when you’re done.

@Aislinn-mollisong it looks great, but I’ve seen that image floating around and I’m pretty sure it’s not free; did you find the artist and ask for copyright license?

But as far as composition and layout, it looks great. The only thing is you might want to consider a slightly bolder, straighter font. Something more in tune with the fantasy mood.

Here’s a link to an article I found: https://www.hunker.com/12587271/what-cuts-through-steel

@ethryndal

@that_writer_girl_99 I’m actually very interested to know what you found out…

You know you’re a writer when you google to see what kinds of materials can cut through steel… @dragon-snapper @ethryndal @kate-flournoy

@catwing First of all, go get a copy of How To Write A Sizzling Synopsis. It’s a very good book.

That said, here are a few tips to get you started. I’m working off your most recent synopsis.

1. Yes, use as few names as possible. Say “main character and his five friends” or something like that.
2. When you say these people are not normal–even…[Read more]

Okay @catwing, I’ve re-pasted this below for you to see if that works any better in your mind without changing any words.

Jack, Alex, Cele, John, Chase, and Amelia are not normal.

Even before they met a mysterious messenger, who says they have to save Allore by finding three jewels and giving them to the king. But the king was said to have…

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@seekjustice You made sense. 😉 And yes, I agree. But not knowing who the main character(s) is/are (or if they’re all main characters), I didn’t comment on it.

@catwing Yes, it is better. May I make a couple more suggestions? *does it anyway* 😉

I’d remove “you could even say they were abnormal” because it’s redundant with the previous sentence.
Good job using short sentences, but too many at once makes it too bitty – there’s a balance. 🙂
For example, the last two sentences. As written, they would read…[Read more]

Farewell @Aislinn-mollisong

@Catwing okay, see you!! *salutes*

@catwing I did a little editing. The first is your original, and the second is my edit version. Your version is a bit wordy and passive, with rather long sentences. Shorter sentence portrays tension and danger. Hope it helps. 🙂

You Were Called By The King
Jack, Alex, Cele, John, Chase, and Amelia are not normal. Even before they met a mysterious…[Read more]

I’m gonna tag @daeus because he’ll probably be able to tell you more than I can.

In my opinion, this is a bit too long, and it reveals a bit too much about the story. I can’t tell you how or where to cut, but that’s just my thought. You want to keep a bit of the story to reveal later, right?