Emma Flournoy

@mariposa  AAAH! Don’t steal my thunder!!!!

It’s still awesome! 😉

@mariposa Oh my word I’m giggling so hard. XD This is THE BESTISTEST. xP

@Mariposa 😂 Oh my.  See what KP has done to us all? Writing songs, poems, and short stories just to chronicle our crazinesss. Love it! 😆

@Mariposa I think I’m dying. XD XD XD

@mariposa These are great. 😀

I believe Gracie and Sierra are @graciegirl and @sierra-r

@Mariposa good heavens, I think I’m dying. XD XD XD

@sleepwalkingmk Nice! I’ve put in a couple of comments on the actual doc for you. 🙂

@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

@xonos-darkgrate I’ll be praying for you 😉

OH

HMM

Yes, as a matter of fact, I do.

Ent Juice.

Merry and Pippin did really well on that stuff in Lord of the Rings

@amy-l-klob

I wouldn’t start off with the action right away, although you do need to start off with something interesting, and that’s because of two things. Firstly) The hardship of the protagonist being separated from her normal life and what’s dear to her (which is great, by the way) isn’t, as you said, going to be as impactful unless the…[Read more]

I didn’t mind that section, but I definitely know some people who would be bothered. As long as you have a connection, cause yeah, like Kate said, it kinda did feel drop you random in the middle of gore and evil for no reason, out of context like that.

About the swear words things. Obviously, top swear words are out. Then you get into the picky…[Read more]

@aratrea Clearly I need to get on the forum more, but putting someone’s username underneath their actual name to save all that extra clicking was a stroke of genius.

@amy-l-klob *sweeps hat off and bows with a flourish* Always an honor to be of service to writers of the Kingdom 😉

@dekreel, any ideas on how I can tweak them? And which ones need major tweaking?

@Xonos-darkgrate what @Daeus and the rest already said, basically, on the general subject.

I did, however, find your excerpt slightly disturbing, which is odd, because I’m not usually disturbed by that kind of stuff. It may have been because it lacked subtlety and I kind of just felt like I had my face shoved in a pool of blood for no reason and…[Read more]

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀