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@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀

@epicaddie2 Continuing to pray! <3

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

@xonos-darkgrate  *shudders*  I don’t think it was too dark.  And it’s very well-written!

@mariposa  Yes…but very ill indeed.  🙂

@ingridrd What do you like to draw? Do you make Christmas cards? 🙂

@dekreel  EEEEEEEKKKKK!!!!!!  Just yes.  I think this calls for a party.  Cake’s on me.

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@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

@leumeister I like Camille, Raphael, and Tristan. Tristan is one of my favorite names!

@leumeister  My votes are Celeste, Raphael, and Tristan.  🙂

@catwing

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Well, @dekreel and @perfectfifths stole my thunder.  But I did know it!   🙂

@dragon-snapper  *trips into the room*  W-what they said…

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@amy-l-klob  You’re very welcome! Yes, exactly! I love how deep it sounds, her normal life being “separated” from her. I have to agree that a good background is essential for that!

Anyway, I’m glad I could help! What is your novel about, if I may ask? (If not, that’s okay 🙂 )

@daughteroftheking  Thank you!! Good to know I’m not the only nerd here! B-)

Good point! Not a lot of people would want the “gollums goll’ming…” Or the “Daleks screaming” XD Well, I suppose the light sabers are good for that! 😛

@seekjustice  Are you still around?

@perfectfifths  Naw I’m just finishing up the scene 🙂