Ellie Wingfeather

@hybridlore

Thanks!!

@everyone

I CAN’T FEEL MY FACCCCCCCEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i just got two teeth pulled…..AHHHHHHH!

@esther-c

Ohh, I see what you mean. I meant the main character isn’t looking at the sky anymore, but yeah, I’ll have to change that. Thank you!

@rae @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @freedomwriter76 @esther-c @thearcaneaxiom

GUYS WE SHOULD BRING THIS BACK!!!

@trailblazer

Thanks! Yeah, I figured it was pretty obvious, lol. I wasn’t really trying to hide it.. I guess I was more concerned with telling the story than surprising the reader. And I’m sure most of us have read other stuff with basically the exact same plot, so it wasn’t exactly surprising anyway.

Got it, I’ll fix that. Thanks!

@savannah_grace2009

Aw, that was so sad! I really liked it though, tag me if you post more.

@grcr

Oohhh, I like it!

@jonas

Yeah, it was mentioned in the dialogue, but I guess it might be easy to miss that.

@rae

Thanks! I fixed the stall part in my document, but it won’t let me edit my post anymore.

@jonas

So, the king has been traveling for a while. He wasn’t aware of the rules put on the people by his regents, who he’d appointed to take care of the country while he was gone.

When I wrote it, I was trying to create sort of an allegory. I know it’s not perfect, but that’s what I was thinking when I came up with it. The king is meant to…[Read more]

@jonas @rae

I added a few sentences that hopefully resolve it a little better? I’m not sure. Do you still think it’s missing something?

… I can’t believe I didn’t see it before—who he was. The suspicion has grown inside of me for weeks, strengthening with each day that passed. When the guards disappeared from the marketplace. When the curfe…

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@rae

Alright! XD Thanks, I appreciate it.

@grcr

Got it!

@jonas

Yeah, I knew it was pretty obvious. I’m not sure how else to write it (where it’s not obvious) in such a short word count.
So, yeah. As soon as I posted it I was like, oh, I need to add something that talks about how the rules/guards have been changed. Really when I wrote it I was thinking it’d have a few more scenes, but then when I got…[Read more]

@grcr

Ugh, I know, that’s the worst. Maybe try Nameberry? I usually go there for names.

@grcr

I like it! Blair and Blaine are really similar names, though. That might get confusing, unless it’s intentional?

@koshka This is really beautiful!

@esther-c

I think Sef and Chase are basically done talking (so are Liv and Lukas)…so sure!

@esther-c

Yeah, Rylee loves her dog named Bear, and just animals and general XD