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@dekreel, good work. 🙂 I like the small installments.

@0-0enyali0-0 Hiiiiyaaa! Nice to see you!

(sorry in advance that my user-tag is super confusing to type, haha)

Yep, I noticed that it was quite creative xD No worries, I just copy and paste everyone’s user-tags, easy as that. 😉 It used to take my computer 2 minutes to load everything, too, but my dad mostly fixed it. I’m not exactly sure what he…[Read more]

@dekreel OH! *smacks face against table* I always do that. My bad. I read it like 3 times and I was so confused! Thanks for pointing that out.

I’m rereading Resistance by Jaye L. Knight. Anyone else reading at the moment? 🙂 @dekreel @anyone

@sam-kowal @warrenluther04 I agree, Saphira is great. She’s definitely one of my favorites. x)

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“As a warning, I have a knack for melting chairs. Or else, why would you have a stool?”

😃😝

Most likely my favorite part. Hands (paws, 🐶) down!

@dekreel It was actually pretty well done.  Since you’ve already had a lot of advice from others about story structure and characters, I’ll just note a couple of editing comments.

First of all, I think you need to do a little more research on helicopters.  The first thing that struck me was the large size of the helicopters you were d…[Read more]

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Thanks! 😀

@dragon-snapper @sage-g @dekreel @pretty-much-any-other-artists

I have a new character! It’s an elf from my new short story (WIP) called Ualair Fencaryn. He has mid-back (if that’s a word) long blond hair, green eyes, and sharp, angular eyebrows. He has a hawk-like, thin, angled face. He is thin but muscular. He usually wears a green-brown tunic…[Read more]

@dekreel This is so cool!!! I love it ❤😉

@dekreel Phew! Thank goodness!

@dekreel CHAP is a homeschool conference in Pennsylvania.  Last year I was there with my family as vendors for our family ministry, and Josiah was there with a KP booth.

@dekreel I agree with the others, that it could benefit from more tension. I’d also try to think of ways to make the main characters more distinct from each other. This could also be a source of conflict, not that they dislike each other, but that different personalities can create obstacles they have to overcome because they care about each…[Read more]

@dekreel Oh my gosh! I did that but with a chess game. Well, sort of. I wrote a short story from the point of view of the chess pieces. I thought it was funny at the time. Needs a lot of polishing now.

You know you’re a writer when you see a stranger with a cast and proceed to come up with fifty stories of how they got the cast.

@dekreel Of course you had to end it there!

I rather enjoyed it. Based on other books I’ve seen, I’d place the target age around 8-10. It’s a good story, kinda simple, but similar in style to other books I’ve read for the 8-10 range.

Now, I’ve never seen those shows you’ve mentioned so I can’t say anything in regard to similar plots or…[Read more]

@dekreel *facepalms* yeah, just realized you stated the age of the MC at the beginning, sorry.

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Okay! Thanks. Looking forward to reading it! : )

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This actually isn’t all that bad. The writing flows nicely and does fit that of a children’s book. Though I agree with @sam-kowal that there is not enough tension that would keep a reader (especially a child) engaged. The story so far seems to be more of a description of the events that are happening as there is not much conflict or…[Read more]