David B. Hunter

@hannah-krynicki Re-education? Sound more like brainwashing. Definitely like the Soviet Union. That little paragraph about the pups being taken from their mother is foreshadowing for something later in the book.

@gretald I would agree. I also agree with Daeus that Orwell got his point across (I’ve also read Animal Farm before)
@Daeus I think the allegory is what makes Animal Farm neat.

In case anyone is wondering, the Raven stands for the Orthodox church. (At least according to my memory of a literary analysis I read for school last year)

@hannah-krynicki I agree with you. I also noticed the voice, which I thought was kind of tongue of cheek. He writes the facts, doesn’t expound on them, yet nonetheless there is a sort of irony. (ex., near the end of Chapter 2, the milk disappears)

On another note, this one structural, the inciting event takes place at about 13% through the book,…[Read more]

Nice excerpt! One thing I thought of. Why can’t the MC just say that the food is poisonous?

@ingridrd I was so disappointed with Mockingjay. On endings. I think that even sad endings should have some element of hope, sacrifice, justice, or something uplifting to shine through the tragedy.

@daeus Thanks for the cookie! 🙂

I have the book. Agreed.

https://kingdompen.org/members/daeus/ I have the book. Agreed.

I read Animal Farm for school last year, and it should be in a box somewhere. Now just to find the right one.

When are we going to start?

Here’s my votes!

1. Chasing Vermeer
2. Animal Farm
3. Cloak of the Light

I’m open to audiobooks.

I’m in! What types of books are we going to dissect?

I’m in! What types of books are we going to dissect.

Great film.

Here’s my thoughts on some of the different structural points.

Inciting Incident: Girl walks into square

Key Event: Second musician shows up.

Second Act: When the stakes rise, and the musicians are fighting over the coin.

Midpoint: Coin going down drain. (This changes the trajectory of the story and like @Adry_Grace said, the…[Read more]

Great film.

Here’s where I pinpoint some of the different structural points.

Inciting Incident: Girl walks into square

Key Event: Second musician shows up.

Second Act: When the stakes rise, and the musicians are fighting over the coin.

Midpoint: Coin going down drain. (This changes the trajectory of the story and like @Adry_Grace said, the…[Read more]

What would you want a betareader to look for?

I enjoyed Tim Shoemaker’s detective series (which I received as a Christmas gift.)

Showing vs. telling is powerful. Not only in describing a setting, but also in the emotions of a character ex.

Oliver sat at his desk in his dorm and stared at the little squiggly lines that made up his exam. He played a discordant solo with his number two pencil…[Read more]

Also, is Joshua writing this letter because he wants to, or someone else (parent, teacher, pastor, etc.) is forcing him to. The mood of each of these two letters could be much different.

I agree with Daeus on starting the letter with just the first name. Joshua or I would probably start with the good news, that Chloe was on the mend. If Joshua is the irresponsible sort, he might apologize, but say that he didn’t mean it, or that his teasing was all in good fun.

If it was me personally, I’d be much more heartfelt, though writing…[Read more]

I agree with Daeus on starting the letter with just the first name. Joshua or I would probably start with the good news, that Chloe was on the mend. If Joshua is the irresponsible sort, he might apologize, but say that he didn’t mean it, or that his teasing was all in good fun.

If it was me personally, I’d be much more heartfelt, though writing…[Read more]